With my husband’s support, I came up with this following a recent accident.

My hubby’s had a fall on the pavement.
He was running for the bus at great pace,
And just as he reached the bus stop
He tripped up and fell flat on his face.
Now he’s lying on the settee looking battered,
His lips are all bruised black and blue.
When he tries to smile he looks so sad
‘Cos he’s missing a front tooth or two.
He went to the dentist for treatment
And came out looking faint and quite white.
The replacement charge was so astronomic
Such a shock for someone who’s tight.
‘Perhaps’ he said with some humour
As we made our way home in the rain,
‘If in future I try to move more slowly
It might relieve some of the monetary pain’.
He decided to get a second opinion.
This dentist hmm..d and ahh..d for a while,
Then he mended his choppers expertly,
And my hubby has got back his smile.
He didn’t have to spend all his pennies,
So he skipped and he hopped out the door,
And went round to everybody beaming,
But he certainly won’t be running any more.

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  • Debra. on Nov 30, 2008

    You come up with the funniest little stories! Keep them coming, Christine. For you make me laugh! God bless.

  • Christine Ramsay on Nov 30, 2008

    Thanks Debra. You are very kind

  • Jasin on Nov 30, 2008

    very descriptive, I enjoyed this one.

  • S A JOHNSON on Nov 30, 2008

    Cute story! ^_^

  • Nick Ramsay on Nov 30, 2008

    Very entertaining, mum. I’m glad dad’s feeling better.

  • Karelee on Nov 30, 2008

    Putting your story in a poem… very nice and quite clever I might add. It also had a splash of humour and that was such a nice touch. Thanks and great job….
    Karelee

  • CHAN LEE PENG on Nov 30, 2008

    Wow, love this poem! Take care!

  • Morgana on Nov 30, 2008

    A very flowing poem— its a sad situation but you made it sound light and funny

  • R J Grant on Nov 30, 2008

    Oh please Mrs Ramsay, let the boy run and play.

    Great little fun verse. You are really very good.

    Grant

  • nobert soloria bermosa on Nov 30, 2008

    a nice way to inspire other people,good piece

  • Christine Ramsay on Dec 1, 2008

    Thank you everyone. My husband is quite chuffed with the poem and is going round reciting it to everyone. He has had his teeth repaired at a much lower charge than originally estimated so he is very happy.

    Take care
    Christine

  • Ruby Hawk on Dec 1, 2008

    Wow! poor guy, that had to be painful and dentist’s are so expensive but sounds like he didn’t have to pay them an arm and a leg. Give him my sympathy. Ruby

  • Christine Ramsay on Dec 2, 2008

    Thanks Ruby. I’ll pass on your message

    Christine

  • Mark Ramsay on Dec 2, 2008

    Oh well serves him right for running after the bus in the first place, hope dad has learn’t a lession, wait and extra half an hour and get a free bus ride or run again and pay from your pocket at the dentist. I know what my deision would be. Very good well done.

  • Christine Ramsay on Dec 3, 2008

    Thanks Mark I know Dad will be very pleased to know you are thinking of him.

  • M J katz on Dec 7, 2008

    OMG…this is so funny! What a great way to tell others about this situation!
    I’ve been busy with another article so I’m just now catching up on all my friends’ reads…and as soon as my husband wakes up, I’m coming back to your site and reading this to him! He’s another ‘accident-waiting-to-happen’ person who sometimes just needs to slow down a bit…Ha ha.

  • Christine Ramsay on Dec 7, 2008

    Thank you Muriel. Its nice to hear from you again. You always make me smile

    Love Christine

  • James DeVere on Dec 20, 2008

    Have I hit th’ jackpot, or what! Wow. Poetry this fluid, in here?
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