Comments on: Honey, Your Mate

By: LOVELY HONEY

LOVELY HONEY — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 15:57:32 +0000

You read me and I read you

that\’s what all Triondites do

thank you

you are gr88888888888

lovely honey

By: Brian Daniel Stankich

Brian Daniel Stankich — Wed, 04 Nov 2009 19:24:34 +0000

agreed

By: T.Rex McGoogle

T.Rex McGoogle — Tue, 03 Nov 2009 20:16:35 +0000

I Cee very clearly where you are coming from. Great advice.

By: deklin42

deklin42 — Tue, 03 Nov 2009 04:59:41 +0000

Nice! I enjoyed it.

By: Alma G.

Alma G. — Mon, 02 Nov 2009 23:36:06 +0000

This is a very fun poem

By: deep blue

deep blue — Mon, 02 Nov 2009 00:09:38 +0000

I like this cee, I never knew you could be hilarious at times. Keeps me laughing.

By: Adam Henry Sears

Adam Henry Sears — Sun, 01 Nov 2009 14:40:38 +0000

This is a cute little ditty. It has a ring to it and it’s true advice. I like the rhythm that you started with, and I think it shows great promise.

I wonder if maybe by working with the rhythm you could make some stanzas out of it, because it almost seems like it doesn’t have enough space within itself for the topics. You could make them as small as rhyming couplets or quatrains and use one of these to represent each segment of thought. That would equal out to about 5 or 6 stanzas depending on a similar choice of topics. This is, of course, only a suggestion, and I think that it will do your piece here more good than harm.

Other that that, great job. Have a nice day.

By: Dr Robert Brignall

Dr Robert Brignall — Sun, 01 Nov 2009 00:32:45 +0000

As the old expression goes, “Don’t dip your quill in the company ink.” You rock, ceegirl

By: sinpalabras

sinpalabras — Sat, 31 Oct 2009 19:09:08 +0000

Very Nice!
Congratulations!

By: wanjiku

wanjiku — Sat, 31 Oct 2009 18:56:53 +0000

Good advice!