How to write a poem, written as a poem. I usually start in bed, laid thinking. I play with words in my head and….. The rest is history as they say.

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I lay in bed and ruminate some words.

Sometimes I jot them down.

Then up I get and type.

I sit alone

So still,

To concentrate.

All focus.

In a trance.

 

Not quite, today, for Mum is here,

On holiday: reading me the news.

I dream of soaring high

Above the ground.

Then dropping,

Swooping down

To skim along the surface of this world.

Possessed by eagle freedom.

 

I can go anywhere,

Any time.

Can pick and choose my planet.

My mind has Hopkins mountains,

I spot a deep crevasse.

The clouds are crawling over hilltops,

Creeping down to valley floors.

A floodplain widens,

Broken only by a snaking river.

Cascading mountain waterfalls

Have led to this meandering sheet

Of water.

 

Yes, my Muse, anywhere can take me,

As I said;

But with Mum reading the news out,

Not today.

Paul Butters

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  • PaulB on Jan 23, 2011

    WOW. Triond published this within seconds. **Another PB poem Fred, slap it on.**

  • Kate Smedley on Jan 23, 2011

    Lol, I was with you there Paul, even to the extent of the interruptions with your mum reading the news out… you captured it so well.

  • PaulB on Jan 23, 2011

    Thanks Kate. One for Leeds eh?

  • Lord Banks on Jan 23, 2011

    Great imagery friend, a little like “John livingstone seagull?” great work. LB

  • s j tubrazy on Jan 23, 2011

    very interesting

  • PaulB on Jan 23, 2011

    Thankyou all. Just gone onto **Hello Poetry** website: it looks quality so have posted 6 of my best there IMHO (using my real name).

  • PaulB on Jan 23, 2011

    Odd, 5 Views produced SIX comments!???? Thanks anyhow.

  • Thespeakman on Jan 23, 2011

    thank you very much

  • PaulB on Jan 23, 2011

    I taught Elvis to sing lol…..

  • AshleyApathy on Jan 24, 2011

    thnx

  • Yovita Siswati on Jan 25, 2011

    nice poem!

  • LewSethics on Jan 26, 2011

    I especially liked the untranslated version in blue.

  • PaulB on Jan 26, 2011

    Yeh Lews, one of best features of Triond: they provide good images for our articles.

  • PaulB on Jan 26, 2011

    PS but not as good as Your images Lews!

  • Edsss on Jan 27, 2011

    I like this very much! :) good share!

  • Goodselfme on Feb 8, 2011

    I was happy to read it in English. I hoped as I scrolled down something of value would peer out and it sure did!. Most often poetry gets published immediately on Triond, so don’t wonder about the powers that be contemplating your well done prose.

  • Flozzabelle10 on Feb 18, 2011

    Good work!

  • Jill Vance on Feb 19, 2011

    Nice images created in your poem.

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