He fails to scream.

The air was moist

it hugged him like steam,

the pain dug into his heart

but he failed to scream,

as he felt his insides being torn apart.

Here the air was a prisoner,

trying to escape his lungs,

he felt the cold pavement,

beneath him, warm,

like a summer storm,

that gently passes by,

as it just adds color to the sky.

Death came like a friendly presence,

a mild essence, with some distaste,

a brief notion made,

and it was out of haste,

death adjusted to life again,

and it dried out his nose and eyes,

then he felt the bullet holes,

he prays, then dies.

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  • Daisy Peasblossom on Oct 12, 2009

    Like the simile.

  • Aleena on Oct 13, 2009

    Frighteningly emotionally realistic, I find myself trying to understand the character and imagining the situation which he is in. Nice work!

  • RS Wing on Oct 13, 2009

    Your really honing your craft man. Perfect meter and rhythm. It captures the essence of deaths moment upon us. Very real and the illustrations are perfectly chosen. Great read!

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