Another of my poems.. Found it in an old notebook of mine which was lost for a whole year!…
Hope you like it!!.. ^^

I bought a new perfume,

And my mother covered her nose,

My sister ran out of the room,

And my brother smelled his toes.


I used it for my birthday,

And my friends didn’t even show up,

Must have been informed by a streetboy,

Or maybe even a cop.


When I used it the first time,

I got a huge shock,

The smell was worse than old sneakers,

And my brother said more than his sock!


I never used it, then,

For I hated the smell,

But I didn’t throw it away,

Getting money isn’t as easy as going to hell!


That night, some robbers entered my room,

Assured me on a harmless mission,

They wanted my perfume,

Were seeking my permission.


I gave it to them without hesitating,

But asked why with pure curiosity.

The head of the thieves came up ahead,

And spoke with what he felt dignity.


“Every time we steal,

Police dogs, after us, they send,

But after smelling this with their powerful noses,

The dog’s life, itself, will end!”.. 

^_^ ^_^ ^_^ ^_^ ^_^

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  • PARAM on Aug 13, 2010

    Very good written……Keep it going.

  • wonder on Aug 13, 2010

    Hilarious, there is suspense too! Excellent.

  • The forgiver on Aug 13, 2010

    I really liked this poem! Superb use of perfume by the thieves! :-) :-D Good work sasuke!
    Sincere regards,
    -The forgiver

  • RSyed on Aug 13, 2010

    awesome!

  • LoveDoctor on Aug 13, 2010

    LOL. very cute and imaginative.

  • sasuke191 on Aug 13, 2010

    Thanks all!!!!…. ^^

  • Baijayanti Pradhan on Aug 13, 2010

    wonderful !

  • Ann Yo on Aug 13, 2010

    Very nice poem, thanks for sharing :-)

  • ashucharu on Aug 13, 2010

    haha….very well-written…love it

  • Atanacio on Aug 13, 2010

    a cute little share

  • giftarist on Aug 13, 2010

    Funny. Well written piece, friend.

  • Raj the Tora on Aug 13, 2010

    LOL, excellent poetry! Some really wear strong perfumes that I suffocate in their presence in a closed area like a lift. Dogs with noses many more times sensitive than us will die… true indeed!

  • Eunice Tan on Aug 14, 2010

    That;’s the problem with new perfume. Well said

  • sasuke191 on Aug 14, 2010

    Thank you all!!!!…. ^^

  • rajaryanme on Aug 14, 2010

    Ha Ha…Very hilarious :-)

  • drelayaraja on Aug 14, 2010

    This is wonderful :) Great tale, funny and lovely..

  • Starpisces on Aug 14, 2010

    thumbs up, cute, interesting poem which rhymes well too.
    By the way, first time I heard robbers want perfume, haha….you should spray on their faces.

  • Ethics0006 on Aug 15, 2010

    Nice Write

  • obikelvin on Aug 15, 2010

    nice share

  • webseowriters on Aug 15, 2010

    Very nice, thanks for sharing

  • sasuke191 on Aug 16, 2010

    Haha!!!….. The comments are lovely, guys!!.. ^^
    Thank you all soo much!!!…. :)

  • Ann Yo on Aug 18, 2010

    Interesting poem, thanks for sharing!

  • Mifra Khan on Aug 29, 2010

    kinda nyc!!!!

  • Goodselfme on Sep 29, 2010

    What a cute saga in poetic form. You’re a kick!

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