Forgiven.

I lay aside my clothes:

            Cap of greed

            Coat of secrecy

            Shirt of vanity

            Shoes of hatred

            Underpants of pride

I stand at the water’s edge and watch as the sea creeps up to wash over my toes. It teases me, giving me a taste of its fresh, cleansing touch before ebbing away, beckoning to me to follow, inviting me to give myself to it, to trust its icy depth.

I begin to wade, to test the water, and my toes grow painfully cold. When the water has crept up to my thighs I have to choose to take the plunge or to retreat.

I plunge.

A sense of well-being overcomes the icy shock I had been expecting.

I feel clean.

I walk among my friends dressed in my new clothes of virtue, forgiven for the past.

My friends are embarrassed.

They see me naked, washed clean of all pretence and sin.

They want me to put back on the rags I’ve left behind,to be like them once more,

the greed, the lust and all the rest.

My naked cleanliness challenges them, exposes the shabbiness of their own clothes, the inadequacy of their masks.

The voices of my friends, the voices of the past, the voice of that great sea of forgiveness all fill my head and call to me. They lay claim to me as I play among the surf and the pebbles and feel the wet sand squelch between my playful, forgiven toes.

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  • kate smedley on Jun 26, 2009

    A powerful message and very interesting imagery in this. I like it a lot.

  • James DeVere on Jun 26, 2009

    The only thing we need to cast off is the notion of, “Sin.” Another mental idea a trap that’s kept us all in naked savagery. Dress yourself in the perfection of this life – not a life full of a notion of, ‘original sin.” That’s the shabby rag.
    We are perfect, born perfect and a joy to know – you never were dressed so, ever.

    Brilliant, Rask, James

  • christopherg1 on Jun 26, 2009

    I love it very profound !

  • RS Wing on Jun 27, 2009

    I get an “Individualism” feel from this piece…almost shedding the earthly posessions we cling to…an interseting piece for sure…alot of symbolism, really makes you think about a lot of our priorities

  • chanbox on Jun 29, 2009

    very powerful. My favorite thing I’ve read on authspot to this day

  • KryshaMayer on Sep 4, 2009

    Great imagery in this very profound prose… Great job!

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