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Lizzie Green on Jan 19, 2009

Tags: ache, afternoon, air, back, black, breathe, Breeze, cheek, cold, Day, gust, heart, Lear, leave, leaves, light, night, notes, Parisian, play, raindrops, sea, shivers, street, Sunshine, warmth, waves, weak, whispering

I’m the breeze, light and fair, whispering through the Parisian air…

I’m the gust around your feet
Step by step along the street
I’m the warmth against your cheek
When your heart is feeling weak
I’m the raindrops on your hand
Moving softly as I land
I’m the crunch of fallen leaves
Beneath your step I still breathe
I’m the beam of sunshine bright
Passing through the evening light
I surround you night and day
I’m the notes you ache to play
I’m the cold night, crisp and black
Rising shivers up your back
I will never leave you here
I’m always going to be near
I’m the waves across the sea
I’m right here, do you see me?

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Tennessee Thompson on Jan 20, 2009
Very nice poem.
Lisa Clayton Williams on Jan 20, 2009
Wonderful imagery! Enjoyable read!
Alicia Wind on Jan 21, 2009
Oh my, what a great poetry…–u must publish this or submit it for critics–well done!
lyndals on Jan 21, 2009
Lovely sweet poem
Intrepidus on Jan 21, 2009
Hey! Pretty poem! You have a very nice flow with words…
Noreen Ann Jenkins on Jan 21, 2009
Very beautiful poem. I love the imagery. I enjoyed reading this one. Keep on writing.
S A JOHNSON on Jan 22, 2009
Oh this was very lovely and a joy to read!
ML Sheldon on Jan 24, 2009
That was a beautifully written poem.
Sharona on Jan 24, 2009
Beautiful sentiment.
Casey Kelley on Jan 28, 2009
Simply Lovely.
Kate Smedley on Jan 28, 2009
That’s lovely and though provoking
kate smedley on Jan 28, 2009
I meant thought provoking, sorry! Thanks for sharing this Lizzie
spiritwalker on Jan 28, 2009
I really love this. It is as though you become the elements of the poem.
smoothe1 on Jan 28, 2009
What great wording, the poetry carried my mind rhythmically to the end
hfj on Jan 29, 2009
A very good poem that flowed well. You won’t have a hard time getting noticed if you keep putting out works as good as this. Well done.
Louie Jerome on Feb 12, 2009
Some nice imagery!
Charles Jordan Jarrett on Feb 24, 2009
I thought your poem was great! I’ll be sure to check out the rest of your work as soon as Im done with this comment. Please be sure to read some of mine. Tell me what you think of Growth and Sides. Lizzie, I am new to this site and am having some trouble getting started. Please, any thing you could tell me that might be helpful would greatly be appreciated. Thanks for your poem.
Bowler on Feb 24, 2009
Very impressive and unique in a way. I like your use of the sublime. The rhymes were also good for flow.

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