In Heaven

razgear659 on May 6, 2009

Tags: EARTH DAY

Heaven.

Here on earth imperfection, there in heaven perfection Here on earth discontent, there in heaven content Here on earth disgrace, there in heaven grace Here on earth disease, there in heaven ease Here on earth hatred, there in heaven love Here on earth war, there in heaven peace Here on earth decay, there in heaven freshness Here on earth selfish, there in heaven selfless Here on earth oppression, there in heaven liberty Here on earth agonize, there in heaven relax

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Vynrigg on Nov 10, 2009
This poem gains it’s see-saw effect, through its rhythmatic use
of counter-poise. Negative images of earth are contrasted with positive images of heaven.

It is easy to grasp and, if read out, would be pleasent on the ear.

It could, possibly, have commericial success, on things like plaques and tea towels: Especially in church shops.

Unfortuneatly the way it has come out on line rather spoils it’s visual impact. Seperate lines would have been stronger.

This, as I know, to my cost, might have been the fault of technology.

Only my opinion. Good effort!

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