In the Silence

Denise Kawaii on Mar 21, 2009

Tags: gaze, love, night, romance, sleep

Grappling with silence from a lover.

My love sits silently, unmoving and motionless.
I reach out for him but he rejects me in his unflinching demeanor.
He does not feel the warmth of my touch.
He dismisses the soft delicate kiss I lay upon his cheek.
I call for him but he does not answer.
In these moments of stillness and quiet I am lost.
I become nothing, when just a moment ago I was everything.
I am as invisible as air.
My conversation falls upon his ears as only the whispering of an evening breeze.
How I long for his touch, for his gaze to fall upon my face.
I lay beside him in quiet anticipation, waiting for a touch that never comes.
As I lay beside him in our bed of hopes and dreams, he turns from me.
I whisper “I love you,” and receive no response.
I become overwhelmed with grief, feeling hopeless.
Oh, how I love him with every breath.
Oh, how deeply it hurts to lay beside him unnoticed.
My heart weeps in the dead of night as I wait to hear his voice.
My skin burns with desire for his gentle touch.
My eyes strain through the darkness to see his face.
As he drifts off into sublime slumber I continue to wait.
I feel myself begin to disappear into the darkness.
As the shadows take hold, I vanish, and I am no more.

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nutuba on Mar 21, 2009
Oh how empty we feel when the one we love isn’t responding … beautifully expressed here.
Kate Smedley on Mar 21, 2009
That’s heartbreaking, the sense of yearning and emptiness in this comes across so well.
clay hurtubise on Mar 21, 2009
Nicely translated feeling.
Thanks,
Clay
George W Whitehead on Mar 21, 2009
Beautiful poem, Denise.
Alice Wonder on Mar 21, 2009
Wow, such strong emotion! It’s almost unpleasant to read because it’s so heartbreaking and helpless of a feeling. Going to stumble this It’s quite beautiful.
Bren Parks on Mar 21, 2009
good one…..thumb up my dear…….
Alina Beck on Mar 21, 2009
A too perfect picture of the desolation of rejection – nice work.
macon on Mar 22, 2009
good work. i couldn’t describe it more – how it feels to be rejected.
Melody SJAL on Mar 22, 2009
Wonderful!
F J McCarthy on Mar 22, 2009
Very well done poem, it is sad how we take for granted the ones who love us,I have had stupid arguments with my wife and reacted like that, Thank you for writing this.
Iokeppa on Mar 22, 2009
Wow! A wonderfully discriptive, emotional piece. Full of feeling. We experience from head to toe what you wanted us to feel. You accomplished your mission with this story, and kept it from running long. This is a good read.
liavocado on Mar 23, 2009
Solidly executed, I think. Good job for following through with your premise. Though surely you meant gentle instead of gentile in line 29 or so?
Bick Parker on Mar 23, 2009
This is really sweet [in a strange way] as you’ve poured your heart out in this verse.

Now if it were me that were there by your side of an evening, I’d gently kiss you and cuddle you tightly to my body. Though seeing as I’m not there, the only thing I can do is send you a big, wet, sloppy kiss … mmmwaaaaaaaaaaaah!

How was it for you?
Sakuragi on Mar 24, 2009
Excellent!!!
Antonette Ramos on Apr 16, 2009
wow! both sad and romantic… i know how it feels…
Paige Stephenson on Apr 22, 2009
Great poem. It holds true to everyone atleast once in their lives.
Joni Keith on Apr 26, 2009
I’d say you left a tear in my eye, but honestly, you left me sobbing. How beautiful.

(The sobbing is only because I know this feeling and you brought it to life with your words…so beautifully)
revivor on Jun 20, 2009
very real and very well expressed – there is a bit of that feeling in us all I am sure

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