Comments on: In

By: woundedsoul6

woundedsoul6 — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 13:06:21 +0000

EXCELLENT

By: MrZebra84

MrZebra84 — Sat, 28 Mar 2009 04:49:00 +0000

This one is neat. I’ve never seen anything else like it.

By: Adam Henry Sears

Adam Henry Sears — Sun, 22 Mar 2009 06:10:58 +0000

Hi, Kellee, how are you?
No offense, but even though you make a valiant effort at writing an extremely long sentence, the grammar is actually slightly off. There are a few sentence segments that don’t actually earn their placing. If I may make a suggestion? First define your true subject and your true predicate, then just keep adding modifiers to each, in equal portions and on opposing sides to maintain the balance. It will help you to keep the meaning of your sentence clear without resorting to segmenting. Like this:
Subject: I wanted; Predicate: to jump.
In my anger, I wanted to jump into the river. In my anger, I wanted so much to jump head first into the river. In my anger and jealousy, I wanted so much to jump head first into the river and drown. In my anger and jealousy, after she dumped me, I wanted so much to jump head first into the river, where it was fastest, and drown. And so on. Anyway, I hope you can see my point that adding sentence fragments one after the other is not nearly as succinct as lining up your subject and predicate with linear coherence.

By: Kellee Kell

Kellee Kell — Mon, 09 Mar 2009 10:08:24 +0000

This is the product of a writing exercise I really enjoy doing where I basically just write the longest sentence I possibly can. It keeps me on my grammatical toes and for some reason usually ends up with a bit of flow and rhyme. So I’m not quite sure what it is.

By: Noelle Bryant

Noelle Bryant — Sun, 08 Mar 2009 16:25:14 +0000

I sthis a poem…?

By: Michael Stonecipher

Michael Stonecipher — Sat, 28 Feb 2009 11:44:57 +0000

I think most people, myself included, have great difficulty with genuine and honest introspection. We hesitate to probe the soul or criticize the tender parts…We rarely hold ourselves to the same standard by which we judge others. We fear the truth within and hide it, even from ourselves.