What happens in the nightclub?


Image – James DeVere09

He looked at me kissing her
She felt him holding her
He stopped
Wondering
Does she love him?
They brushed sweet words together
They glared with jealous fervor
Forever looks were exchanged
The twins chuckled
Then smiled
She approached and flirted
He interjected
He kissed then left
They cuddled then smirked
He brushed her gently
They touched and left me
His Mona Lisa smile left me
Feeling sweet but empty

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Comments (10)
  • denus on Jan 13, 2009

    Really great work.

    cheers,

    denus

  • K Kristie on Jan 13, 2009

    Interesting piece…Nice image.

  • Rask Balavoine on Jan 13, 2009

    It takes a bit of thinking through, this one does – good stuff.

  • Christine Ramsay on Jan 13, 2009

    Good work. A lovely picture and a sweet poem.

    Christine

  • Morgana on Jan 13, 2009

    Ah yes, the things that go one in a nightclub. I enjoyed this piece very much, the picture is very good too.

  • Allen on Jan 13, 2009

    This is pure garbage. A waist of imagination, thinking and time.

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Jan 13, 2009

    i’m glad i’m done with that scene

  • eddiego65 on Jan 17, 2009

    Intriguing piece indeed. Nice image!

  • M Ashley on Jan 18, 2009

    Definitely intriguing. One of those “things that make you go, ‘hmmm’.”

  • Allen & Dan on Feb 9, 2009

    This is pure garbage. A waist of imagination, thinking and time

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