This was written for a girl I knew in high school who died at the age of sixteen.

When we were children
We dreamed of another day,
Playing dress-up with our mother’s clothes,
With over-sized shoes that never seemed to fit.
We laughed, believing we would never grow old.
Dear Julia, how did you know?
Something changed on that journey to the grown up world.
Worlds apart, you took the dangerous path.
Too many years passed without you,
My dearest Julia.
Come and save me from my grief.
Like the fiery bird flying from the ash.
The Phoenix you became.
Becoming the creature, the flames destined to burn out.
Begone, I sing to my forgotten sun.
Never a lucid being were you meant to be.
Another day, another way, you might.
Rise, sweet Julia.
Say goodbye to the moon.
The tambourine man lives here no more.
His song was a prayer that cut to the core.
Give me a day, a moment to be a child with you again.
A pray to the sun.
Give us a world of innocence, one without sin.
There are no more chances for our Julia.
I can see.
What I would give to join you, my sweet Julia.
No more would I be
Champion to your victim.
But like a fiery bird, you have fled to the ash.
Goodbye, mystical Phoenix.
All proof of you now lives in the past.
Julia now sleeps.
No more pain befalls her.
I pray the lord her soul to keep.

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  • Vanja Kovacic on Dec 10, 2008

    Very powerful stuff! Reading the poem I could really feel the grief, the sadness and the regret. From the line “The tambourine man lives here no more” I understand that Julia died of an overdose, which is a great way to explain it without saying too much outright. Anyway, I really liked it and keep writing!

  • rileyd on Dec 10, 2008

    This is so sad. I\’m sorry for your grief.

  • Justi Smith on Dec 10, 2008

    THat was wonderful….Very Moving….I ask you to please check out my poem and tell me what you think

  • Christy Tuller on Dec 10, 2008

    Wonderfully touching poem Allison! So much emotion! I love it.

  • Adam Henry Sears on Dec 10, 2008

    Hi, Allison, How are you?
    I really like the reminiscence and enjoy the way it was handled. Good job. Thanks for sharing.

  • Will Davis on Dec 11, 2008

    Thank you for putting this one on I know it hurt you when she died but now I know how much.

  • Joanna Maharis on Dec 18, 2008

    This is such a beautiful poem with crisp images filled with passionate feelings. Some great work here.

    Take Care,

    Joanna Maharis

  • Angel on Dec 27, 2008

    wow, i feel the pain an saness in this write. love how u word it.

  • shaky on Jan 2, 2009

    bring water to my eyes

  • IreniaPehuajo on Jan 23, 2009

    How nice…although it´s sad.Great piece of work.
    Bye

  • Silent Writer on Feb 2, 2009

    This is lovely, even though it is so sad.

  • Write Easy on Feb 15, 2009

    powerfully written…the poem does bring out the pain of loss.

  • Allison Anderson on Feb 24, 2009

    The sorrow of the world encompasses this loss.

  • Josh Pillault on Mar 20, 2009

    Wow! Very similar to my poem entitled \”Just Too Late\” about a friend of mine who took his own life. Your style in this context is quite similar to mine. I\’ll give you an \’I Liked It\’ If you\’ll return the favor? =)

  • Bella Phoenix on Apr 8, 2009

    nicely written.. very powerful indeed. hope you can also comment on my poems so i would know if i can improve. have a nice day!

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