This poem describes the sorrowful legend of Kiku of Himeji Castle in Japan and the impact of this legend on the poet.

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Kiku of Himeji-jo*

As we walk along stone walls

with leafless cherry trees,

a rainy Himeji rises white,

in fog and mist, with grey

flowered tiles glistening

like tear-stained cheeks of

legendary Kiku, mourning

the imagined loss of a

tenth earthen dish which she

thought she broke and didn’t,

and was sentenced to death

for her imaginary carelessness.

How Himeji’s dark and wooden

walls must have closed in

on beautiful and tearful Kiku!

But when heaven itself comes

to earth during season of

cherry blossoms, Himeji-jo

will float in fragrance like

a great white heron bearing

Kiku’s spirit to Paradise.

Kiku’s name means Chrysanthemum and the castle she lived in means White Heron. We visited this castle during my one-year’s stay in Japan while teaching at Osaka University.

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  • ken bultman on Oct 27, 2009

    It\’s a beautiful poetic story/.

  • riccardof on Oct 27, 2009

    I have a hard time reading this poem out loud when I give poetry readings.

  • David Crerand on Oct 27, 2009

    A very beautiful poem with wonderful imagery but, take a good look at it and consider adding some punctuation to better control the pacing and flow of the visual images. When the images are so well thought out and delicate as a flower’s petals, allow the reader to pause, to appreciate your effort, to digest the beauty. (See what I mean?)

  • riccardof on Oct 27, 2009

    Thank you David. I Will punctuate as you suggest.

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