Fear controls us all…

My response to the Triond forum writing challenge 23, where something was to be written using the words "Chaos" and "Ebony Amulet"

The incessant hooting pierces my soul. Why does this feathered fiend of the netherworld punish me so? Every night for what seems an eternity this messenger of the reaper visits me and injects me with venom of adrenalin. Although a drug of choice for the young it is nothing but a reminder of how far my foot is in the grave, and I find it difficult to steady my beating heart. There was a time when that muscle would beat in time with another in a resonance of bliss that although long lost is still not forgotten. Oh how I have loved…and oh how I have lost. I reflect for a moment and I feel pity for my heart, for in truth for the majority of my long life I have filled it with hate, vengeance and regret.

I have pondered on my many lonely nights why it is that the owl follows me so. How is it that the thing can live so long? Regardless of my searching I have found no answer and I am left to fill the void with my own twisted reasoning. I have long convinced myself that on that night of our tin anniversary, when she was cruelly taken from me, a part of my soul was torn and flung into that half dead demon that now torments me. I was fractured in two, with all that was good in me removed and left resident in this twilight half dead demon of purgatory. What remained was a torn and twisted beast of agony that would never rest again and would be shadowed by a bird possessed. Indeed I pity the bird for it has been dragged into a lingering death. I am sure it cannot rest until I do.

At first I thought it may have been a splinter of my love trying to reach me to help me find those who had destroyed our bliss. It cannot be though, for the hooting cry of a pain refreshed has done nothing but wake me with the cutting blade of fear night upon endless night. My love would give me rest and thus it cannot be her for I have found none in over forty years. It cannot be her…not even a reflection of her. Although tonight I must wonder if I have been warned of a pending doom, for in the dark depth of the room I can see him – standing there in the door way. Without a single doubt I know this is the remaining spec of filth that I have hunted for so long. The hunted become the hunter and turned to strike me the final fatal blow? Do I now lie on my death bed? What cursed damnation is this that the scum that I have vowed to destroy be able to come and end me now? There is no justice in all of creation if such a travesty can be allowed.

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  • Belinda Dobie on Jun 30, 2010

    Wow, Duff, emotional and deep. You had me glued to the screen all the way through. Excellent. :-)

  • Jimmy Shilaho on Jun 30, 2010

    A very nice post. You’ve won the challenge with this one Duff.

  • Casey Mack on Jun 30, 2010

    Gripping, suspenseful, loved the twist at the end. A very good read, my friend.

  • Karen Gross on Jun 30, 2010

    A well crafted tale, full of suspense, with your trademark ingeniously twisted ending.

  • maranatha on Jul 1, 2010

    Duff, you’re getting better, my friend. Well done.

  • suhail on Jul 1, 2010

    whoa powerful write … word by word i got hooked !

  • Katie Marie on Jul 2, 2010

    A tale well told by the great weaver of tales.

  • Butterfly Musings on Jul 4, 2010

    Wow, gripping as Poe,intense as Rice,poetic as Dylan.
    You truly have a masterpiece there!!!!

  • Spiritt on Jul 4, 2010

    Oh that’s just terrible.

  • Spiritt on Jul 4, 2010

    Oh, hehe I didn\\\’t mean it like that at all. I meant, it was so sad. But it was a great and wonderful story. smiles.

  • BradONeill on Jul 5, 2010

    great tale duffster. i particularly liked your ending line.

  • RS Wing on Jul 5, 2010

    Bravo! Really intense and vivid imagery. You possess a great gift, Duff. The gift and talent to transport the reader from your mind into a tale of pure terror and revelation. Finely crafted prose and very enjoyable read. Thumbs up!

  • Cebah on Jul 5, 2010

    Great write, very descriptive and so very, very dark!

  • Ruby Hawk on Jul 5, 2010

    Duff, it’s one of your best yet. I loved reading every word. You should publish a book of your short stories.

  • wordperson on Jul 6, 2010

    The manner in which you slowly built up the tension in your story was excellent. The twist in the end was very interesting.

  • LCM Linda on Jul 7, 2010

    You built up the tension well and the ending was quite a surprise, it’s a sad one but well written. Enjoy reading this story very much. Thanks for the sharing. :)

  • Kate Smedley on Jul 8, 2010

    That’s intense and extremely deep, I didn’t see that coming at all dude! You have a brilliant and unique writing style, completely ‘unputdownable’. Ruby’s right, you should publish some of your stuff and share it with the world!

  • Annie Hintsala on Jul 9, 2010

    This is still blocked on my computer, and my old computer at home won\’t let me comment. Dammit. So, you got two views out of me. Good one.

  • Bull Muse on Jul 16, 2010

    Quoth the hoot owl: “never more”.

  • S A JOHNSON on Jul 26, 2010

    Just amazing. I always love reading your work.

  • CHIPMUNK on May 30, 2011

    Great work well expressed

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