The poem with serveral stories, deep in thought, imagining life without people and the endings so cruel.

Glimmering rose pearls hung around her neck

As she lay in thought for hours awake

Drawn to the faces, she never knew

Wondering life without you

 

Rusted chains force bruised arms

Causing contempt whilst he harms

Struggling the alibi; as the victim cries

Dark shadows form the skies

 

So what did happen in the end

With no more injuries still to mend

All was left was a six foot box

And a man, barred in locks.

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  • yellowspotlight89 on Jun 11, 2010

    that’s interesting. its got vivid images. It has a unique, poet flow and a feel of dark, mysterious, bright, almost romantic. it was interesting. i’d give it a 6 1/2 – 7.

    also, there was a mistake at the “want did happen”

  • FrillyTutu on Jun 11, 2010

    Wow thats brilliant!!

  • PinguPip on Jun 12, 2010

    Sorry about the mistake.. I’ll change it. Thanks for the comments. :)

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