Lifesucker

sweetievee on Dec 11, 2009

This one’s for anyone who has ever had a loser in their life and who’s finally woken up and gotten rid of him/her!

Lifesucker, you better retract your claws,

Because I have no use for you at all.

True, there was a time when I fell prey;

Thinking I needed your slimy way.

Not knowing that I deserve more,

I laid down and became your whore.

And you can talk all you want.

But I see right through your front.

Your obsession; it stops.

I’m calling all the shots.

It’s really quite sad,

You need me so bad.

Go get a life.

This one is mine.

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Comments (9)

Valerie Curtiss on Dec 11, 2009
Good on you, everyone needs to refuse to feed a lifesucker.
cafftee on Dec 11, 2009
I sense some very healthy self-assertion and self esteem here sweetievee. Liked it a lot.
sandie on Dec 11, 2009
lol nice poem, wish a lot of people would wake up and get rid of losers.
BullwinkleMuse on Dec 12, 2009
Visceral, with a good choice of meter for the theme. I bet this one felt good to get out.
BradONeill on Jan 11, 2010
I dont know anything about meter but I love the power and the self awareness in this piece. Move onward and upward.
drelayaraja on Jan 12, 2010
Nice writing
Anupam Kachroo on Jan 16, 2010
liked it …
RS Wing on Apr 30, 2010
Your meter is always very good. The material is like a pointed declaration. Great work. Keep writing your poems. They’re really good and finely crafted.
jimbob1 on May 6, 2010
Vee…no mistaking the not-so-subtle message in this powerful poem…no point in living life as a host to a parasite…sounds like you done good by shaking him off your tail…very inspiring…I liked it a lot…thanks for taking the time to compose and share this…

Hi there!