Kinda self-explanatory.

Scream pierce the joke of what is my peace.

My passing idea of sleep is taunted,

By memories that refuse to cease.

Desperate to just once feel alright.

Surrounded by darkness,

Will I ever find the light?

Falling further away from that dream again. How did I get so upside down?

I wonder where I went wrong,

Only to realize I’ve been

Walking backwards all along.

Predestined, forever will I be haunted.

By my tortured past.

Despite my every efforts to merge,

Past, present into the future.

Forever on the verge

Always on the edge but never quite there,

I fear I will always be trapped in limbo

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  • Dee Gold on Mar 1, 2009

    nice title

  • AC Hamilton III on Mar 1, 2009

    Very intense material. Many people often feel that way. You can conquer all that tries to possess you and keep you down. Never let go, nobody can take anything from you that you don’t give, unless they can overpower and take it by force, and even then you fight like the fury of relentless fire…..it’s yours to take back… Very expressive read.

  • Olivia Reason on Mar 1, 2009

    The title of this piece is very apt- and the descriptions are as dark as the emotion described.

  • papaleng on Mar 1, 2009

    a powerful write where the author vividly expressed her thoughts.

  • Will Gray on Mar 1, 2009

    Great write! Never give up!!!!!!!!!!

  • nesita on Mar 1, 2009

    poetry to me allows a person to see inside the writers mind and heart we open ourself to our readers your poem gave me a glimpse of what .you are thinking keep up the good work.

  • Joni Keith on Mar 1, 2009

    Great expression of self. I think limbo is the very worst place to be.

  • M A Bhanpurwala on Mar 1, 2009

    Your way of expression is good

  • Karen Gross on Mar 1, 2009

    Limbo is a horrible place to be! Getting out requires choice: do you look up or down? To quote a famous theologian, Bob Dylan, “It may be the devil, or it may be the Lord; but you’ve got to serve someone!”

  • rutherfranc on Mar 1, 2009

    it is never a good feeling to be in damned if you do and damned if you don`t situation.. great portrayal of the emotion..

  • jewelsofmine on Mar 1, 2009

    Great free flowing emotions. Stay focus, and strong. Teach others what you have learned. Great writing!

  • Sandra A Flowers on Mar 1, 2009

    great intensity, I really like this poem, flow and feel emaculate.

  • Lee Altman on Mar 1, 2009

    good one

  • monica55 on Mar 1, 2009

    A good message about how the past can have an haunting effect on the present life, but build the message up some more to show the victory into the future. Good work
    Monica

  • Undicided on Mar 2, 2009

    good mood caption AstralMelody… well structured well done as always..

  • Joshua Miguel on Mar 2, 2009

    great post, as always.

  • CutestPrincess on Mar 2, 2009

    loved it… keep up the good work!

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Mar 5, 2009

    I love your writing and free expression.

    But you are not stuck in limbo. It can change. You can change. I’d love to tell you how.

  • spiritwalker on Mar 6, 2009

    What a horrible place limbo must be.

  • Mr Ghaz on Mar 6, 2009

    Excellent! well-written piece. Lovely poem. I really liked it! Thnx 4 sharing

  • J Ezeilo on Mar 21, 2009

    Well written. Self examination and self assessment are always difficult and brave. Nice job.

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