Poetry Written by me. (Timothy Ray). 9-2-08. Please rate and comment.
THX IN ADVANCE!

“Looking Down”

The last thing i hear, is baby don’t cry,

Felt her finger rubbing tears and blood from my eyes.

Slowly started falling up,

Above the clouds, through the sky.

Looking down at my baby,

Watching me die.

I watch her as she cries, she thinks about me.

She’s thinking of where, we were supposed to be.

Together… always together.

Never apart.. never away.

Always and forever we’ll stay.

Together..

Until death do us part.

Those words she’s heard once before,

She fell to her knees on the hospital floor.

I fell to my knees outside heaven’s door.

Lord give me one more chance,

I’m begging you please.

My wife and my daughter,

Are both on their knees.

Praying to you…

Asking, to give me my life.

I’m asking you.. simply,

for one more night.

To tell them i love them,

And tell them i care.

To make sure they don’t cry,

When their daddy’s not there.

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Comments (4)
  • Billyfnstacy on Nov 18, 2009

    Very nicely written and full of emotion. Good work.

  • TimothyRF on Nov 20, 2009

    Thanks fer the input Broski, I appreciate it.

  • Joie Schmidt on Nov 21, 2009

    Oh my God…………. you MUST keep writing – - superb – - you have a rare gift*

    My favorite lines:

    She fell to her knees on the hospital floor.

    I fell to my knees outside heaven’s door.

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • TimothyRF on Nov 21, 2009

    Thank you very much Liane. I appreciate your comment :)

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