A sad little girl.

Behind dark brown eyes
And a sad, broken smile
Hides a forlorn soul

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  • qasimdharamsy on Feb 27, 2010

    Nice one…

  • Atanacio on Feb 27, 2010

    I enjoyed this little piece– but you knew that I would

  • Lady Sunshine on Feb 27, 2010

    Actually Frank, I had no idea you were going to enjoy it. Who enjoys my work anyways? :P
    Thank you for always reading my work. :D

  • deep blue on Feb 27, 2010

    Of course, everyone enjoys your work. Don’t be hard upon yourself LS. Sometimes our spirits could be well beyond comprehension. Ken is back so you will have additional writing buddies to cheer you up.

    Cheers,

    Will

  • Mickey Pig Knuckles on Feb 27, 2010

    Ahhh Lady, you always write with such a deep intensity that overflows with heartfelt emotion. One can only hope you may never decide to place your poetic pen down, as you would have some sad reading fans bearing nothing but a frown. Excellent Poem My Dear…

    Mickey Pig Knuckles

  • ken bultman on Feb 27, 2010

    Beautful, beautiful, brown eyes….
    I’ll never love blue eyes again.

    (Will, leave me out of this.)

  • Fatema on Feb 27, 2010

    short and sweet

  • Sourav on Feb 27, 2010

    Short yet a deep write.

  • Val Mills on Feb 27, 2010

    You capture so much in so few words.

  • 8Shei8 on Feb 27, 2010

    short but carries so much emotion!

  • AlmaG on Feb 27, 2010

    I can very well relate to this. Great haiku.

  • Shirley Shuler on Feb 27, 2010

    Hi Lady Sunshine, beautiful haiku. You make me want to cry for a sad little girl. For the record, we enjoy your work!!!!

  • ganeshgolha on Feb 27, 2010

    Well written

  • rutherfranc on Feb 27, 2010

    :)

  • Melody SJAL on Feb 28, 2010

    So vivid…

  • giftarist on Feb 28, 2010

    Well you’re a great writer milady.

  • Sharif Ishnin on Feb 28, 2010

    I hope her sadness is the end of darker days. Let her know that white and bright sandy shores awaits her. :)

  • bailieman on Feb 28, 2010

    Without sadness we cannot understand the joy of happiness.

  • standingproud on Mar 1, 2010

    deserted or abandoned and showing signs of neglect
    oh that is ME

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