great piece of work…

Lots of passion here; evocative and expressed so well

Nicely composed poem!

A very romantic and passionate piece. Well done.

Christine

Very romantic and love the rhyme in it and the flow.
Very true in it symbolic pictures it creates in our head.
Awesome
Thanks Lee Ness

A little open-air get-together of romance. Very nice.

This reminded me of Mina and Hwang’s beautiful, romantic and passionate love affair.

Very good, Sunshine. You have a mood and a theme and have captured a rhyme that is complimentary of it. With the singular rhymes per stanza, you convey the singular intent and the idea of being completely wrapped up in your love. Good job on this poem.

I noticed a couple of twitches in the metric scheme that might need a little tweeking, but other than that it’s well presented. Thanks for sharing, and have a good day.

Great one! Loved it!

Yes, I like this one very much. Not too sweet but just right.

You depict the real picture,
I saw happening in front of my eyes
In the park
They gave me a hearty surprise,
Unmindful they moved their hands around
Made moans and merry sounds

I was taken aghast the world
Has taken up so fast
In my time we
Could hardly hear
The other one say
Oh darling
I love you yes my dear.

Today we have been left far behind
To make up in parks
They have no second thoughts,
But for others
Pleasant memories
They leave for ever to remind.

A magnificent poetry. It must be hard to keep the rhyme while indulging in love with such intimate, sensual pleasure. You are indeed one of a kind, Lady. Thanks for sharing.

Now that’s very passionate and romantic.

Phew…. I need a cold shower

something u’d give on a valentines, very romantic.

A great piece..romantic.

Great poem with real passion and ecstasy!

Definitely passionate definitely romantic.