Hmm, interesting. I understand the choice of words in the second line, but the last line is a little confusing. I find it difficult to see how love could leave a living soul during such a time. Wouldn’t it remain, though the loved one departs?
Other than that, good job. It’s a good length for the point you’re making, and again, good word choice.
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