For writing challege 17. A sailor’s love is left behind when he goes missing at sea. Alone, she discovers that his love reaches beyond his watery grave.

Lost in stormy sea, her sailor is missing.

Nevermore to return, despite all wishing.

A small candle is still lite for his beacon.

delivers only seaweed,  hopes weaken.

Long months alone,  he surely is gone!

Yet alone at night, she feels him anon.

Closing her eyes, abide phantom caress

Be comforted as love, he’ll forever profess.

“Come to me , love!” hear his voice implore.

Frequently she sees him abiding offshore,

Feet enter the water, forsaking the coast.

Despair soon perish, akin to his ghost.

Sands painted white in the moonshine

Smiling, she follows him into the Brine.

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  • irenen1 on Jan 28, 2010

    This is very good for something you do not think is. I think I will light a small candle and place it on a bit of seaweed in memory of the lovers!

  • BradONeill on Feb 1, 2010

    good ending! I liked it alot.

  • I Have Had Enough on Feb 1, 2010

    Great build up to a tragic tale of love lost to the sea.

  • Darla Cooke on Feb 1, 2010

    Beautifully written poem for the challenge. So very tragic and sad.

  • Duff D Moss on Feb 2, 2010

    That was really good. I enjoyed that a lot. Thanks for playing in the challenge. Hope you have a go next round too.

  • maranatha on Feb 2, 2010

    So sweet and sad. You told the story well.

  • David Crerand on Feb 2, 2010

    very nicely told. you paint the sad emptiness very clearly with your word choices. Well done.

  • David Crerand on Feb 2, 2010

    great word choices describe the sad emptiness beautifully. well done

  • oldster on Feb 2, 2010

    Lovely little poem Valerie.

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