Something I just felt at the moment and tried to put it in words. hope u guys like and enjoy it.
your comments are much needed and appreciated.
Thanks.

my life so cruel, what can i do

even angels piercing away, at my heart

so little time, so much to do

running in circles, back to the start

heavens above, with rings of fire

hell looks so much better

vultures look at my ailing body,with desire

waiting for the last resistance to shatter

no i can not, i must no die

for HE beholds such spite for me

all this for making you cry?

oh! what sin has been committed by me

oh love! tell me, a way to repent

or else i shall burn for eternity

oh but wait ! i smell her scent

of she, who carelessly plays with my destiny

will i be forgiven of sins committed

or she will condemn me infinitely

with not the slightest idea,i have to go

i wish my last breath could wait !!!

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Comments (5)
  • Theresa Johnson on Oct 12, 2009

    wonderful imagery

  • Emma Green on Oct 14, 2009

    Great work, very powerful!

  • Mustafa on Oct 15, 2009

    Strong… heart felt!!

  • Leonardo da Vinci E. on Oct 20, 2009

    I feel the contortions of life in this poem. It gives a sense of constant struggle.

  • xoxo on Oct 25, 2009

    Very well written with such strong emotions. Liked it.

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