My Life is Gone

tonisan60 on Sep 2, 2008

Tags: black, dark, delusions, dust, Illusions, lad, Life, madness, permission, prey, sad, soul, Sound, time

My life is black.

My life is dark and black and sad:
It’s just as dust, without a lad.
It’s like a dream that never fades
or like a sound that always wades.

My life is gone, forever now.
I do not know the why, the how:
It fled, escaped, it ran away
as madness shaped or like a prey.

My life had vanished long time ago
without permission, it took my soul
and went chasing my false illusions
before my death, after delusions.

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Shafi Choudhury on Sep 2, 2008
I think this was heartwarming. I liked the way you used the rymes!Well Done!
Kim Buck. on Sep 2, 2008
Deep, dark…
claris on Sep 2, 2008
very sad, but it expresses a deeper meaning
Eden Emersen on Sep 2, 2008
I can relate . . . wish I knew the “out” to escaping suffering and affliction.
The Quail on Sep 2, 2008
Very dark and deep; thank you for sharing.
Lady Syxess on Sep 2, 2008
Deep, dark and passionate. A touching read. Good work Toni
Balzac on Sep 2, 2008
Well written! Saludos.
jo oliver on Sep 2, 2008
We all chase something till death, even if it is just air. Thanks for sharing this. Very touching.
Unofre Pili on Sep 2, 2008
Metaphysical piece. Well-written!
neelam pandey on Sep 3, 2008
very intense thought…and the mystical touch enhances its beauty
nobert soloria bermosa on Sep 3, 2008
very expressive lines,thanks
Anna Ski on Sep 3, 2008
Totally captivated me, your choice of words are excellent. Your english is fantastic!
Melody Arcamo Lagrimas on Sep 4, 2008
I simply like it.
Speed Limit on Sep 6, 2008
An excellent poem, even though it is hard to identify with the message. Here is a reason to stay alive – we want to read more of your poetry.
tracy sardelli on Oct 1, 2008
Gosh, this is so very sad….no one should ever feel this way…I hope that all is well and will be well with you.
Lavia on Oct 3, 2008
I feel you. This poem is amazing. It so sad, so brilliant.
Asad Samad on Jul 23, 2009
Lovely verse. these words come from the depth of soul. It mirrors my life. something terribly gone wrong with life and there is no way out till death. May God forgive us all. Ameen.

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