Not based on true events, just based on true emotions.

Then down the hole we watch you slide

along the sill where stones abide,

and stone and flesh come side to side.

And there you skid to rest.

In solitude, together we,

your siblings, friends and family,

are thrust in quiet misery,

watch, strung, breaks in our chest.

Too late, your heat escapes you now;

the chilly dirt, the frozen brow,

and all your frigid whispers sough

in layers on the snow.

Too late, and yet your shifting weight

— asleep in tongues of icy hate

in skin, on lips — your weight in fate

is naught for us to know.

Is naught, and yet we seek to pierce

the consequence, for life is fierce-

ly honest, like the works of Bierce,

and blame is on the brink.

In silence on the frosty earth,

and reddened snow, our tears of dearth

commingle with your fading hearth;

we watch your embers sink.

Then down the hole we watch you slide

along the sill where stones abide,

and stone and flesh come side to side.

And there you skid to rest.

In solitude, together we,

your siblings, friends and family,

are thrust in quiet misery,

watch, strung, breaks in our chest.

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  • Kate Smedley on Feb 11, 2011

    That is stunning work – I am going to have to reread it it a few times – your choice of language and the sense of ‘chill’ that resonates throughout the poem is beautifully done. I’ve not read anything of yours in so long but this is so worth the wait. There seems to be such a sense of loss and grief in this poem. Just brilliant.

  • Stickinthemud on Feb 12, 2011

    Why, thanks, Kate! Coming from you, that means a lot. :)

  • CHAN LEE PENG on Feb 15, 2011

    I agree with kate that your selection of words were unique and attractive. Keep it up!

  • C Jordan on Apr 20, 2011

    Excellent piece of work.

  • Jessica Louise on Jun 12, 2011

    I’m impressed! :) Not only do you give wonderful critique, but you write amazing poems! Thanks for sharing! :)

  • Redfiery on Aug 2, 2011

    you are a born artist ! Thats what I wanted to tell you after reading this.
    I also appreciate the way you opened up while reviewing my poem’ It’s raining love” . Well I agree with you heartache’s are something that we cannot get rid of them. I have some heartbreaking poems also[ posted there]. Have a nice day too.

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