http://authspot.com/poetry/one-more-try-baby/ Fri, 01 Jun 2012 16:55:12 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 http://authspot.com/poetry/one-more-try-baby/comment-page-1/#comment-1036053 louise labudde Tue, 01 Dec 2009 10:25:05 +0000 http://authspot.com/poetry/one-more-try-baby/#comment-1036053 um thanks. the story to it was that I messed uo ans took something my boyfriend was joking about to heart and ended it with him hence messing up and now im trying to tell him how sorry i am because i know he didnt mean it and i want to make amends um thanks. the story to it was that I messed uo ans took something my boyfriend was joking about to heart and ended it with him hence messing up and now im trying to tell him how sorry i am because i know he didnt mean it and i want to make amends

]]> http://authspot.com/poetry/one-more-try-baby/comment-page-1/#comment-1035961 Kris Snow Tue, 01 Dec 2009 08:24:58 +0000 http://authspot.com/poetry/one-more-try-baby/#comment-1035961 Interesting topic but I'm afraid there is just not enough intrinsic backstory here for me to understand exactly what you mean to say. That is- you know what you are talking about, but if you expect readers to feel what you feel you will need more of the story in the poem. For the form, you did well. Interesting topic but I’m afraid there is just not enough intrinsic backstory here for me to understand exactly what you mean to say. That is- you know what you are talking about, but if you expect readers to feel what you feel you will need more of the story in the poem. For the form, you did well.

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