After a street gun-fight there was an odd way to die….

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His voiced cracked,

almost wordless,

his emotions stacked,

nerveless,

but he shot from the hip,

on his shoulders a chip,

as the young man crumpled to the ground,

no noise, no vision, no sound,

his soul closed the distance,

between life and death,

it was such a mess,

last breath

made its way out,

he heard the living shout,

the pain sang,

his ghost rang

the bell of death,

death talking amongst each other,

comparing notes with one another,

muffled voices,

odd choices,

but clearly audible,

then an angel’s wings flapped,

his sanity snapped,

and his mind clapped,

on his way to hell,

and God had nothing else to tell.

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  • plastichats on May 6, 2009

    why two pictures?

  • ashleycollier on May 6, 2009

    Excellent work

  • Evelyn M Carter on May 6, 2009

    Wow! Very excellent! Almost breath-taking. Very deep and interesting. Yeah, I really liked this nice read. Thanks for sharing. (will probably be thinking about this one for awhile…)

  • Valerie on May 6, 2009

    wow what a rush

  • Roque on May 6, 2009

    very different

  • Rincon on May 6, 2009

    very different for me too

  • RS Wing on May 7, 2009

    Wow! That is a great piece of work! True writers write, and this is really some great writing….I’ve always envied poets, it’s such a more refined craft then other literature….in my opinion anyway. Keep posting, it’s enjoyable and inspiring work….I will pass this one on!

  • Kress on May 7, 2009

    this took my breath away

  • danielle on May 7, 2009

    i liked it..it has a nice flow to it

  • Pete Laforest on May 7, 2009

    its a great poem i loved reading it

  • ClavinSr on May 8, 2009

    this was mind twisting for me i liked it

  • Gwynn-Fan on May 9, 2009

    this was another great shot-type of poem

  • Gelica on May 9, 2009

    You are indeed a good story-teller

  • Kingtop on May 18, 2009

    so well done

  • callkat33 on May 22, 2009

    my god very well written

  • Sammy2000 on May 26, 2009

    my fav one

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