YOU figure it out.

The Mannequins
they crashed to the ground
And…
mmm
oh, God, she sipped her drink like a pro
she looked down at her lap with the same cocky expression
“I am NOT very easily fooled, miss.”
she is blind but she sees EVERYTHING
“Haha”
what does she know?
“I know everything, love”
I raise my eyebrow…
and smirk
I’ve got her beat
I could pull out a gun
and blow her head off
splatter her brains on the people behind her
but what fun would that be?
I could….
slowly strangle her
I smile at the thought
she scowls, “what’re YOU grinnin’ about? hmm?”
I wipe the corners of my mouth
she’s angry now
“Don’t be so cocky. I HAVE you”
I look up
unscathed,
throw my head back….
and laugh
her scowl grows deeper
“Shut up!”
I control myself
“I’m sorry, it’s just funny, that’s all.”
“What’s funny? I want to laugh too.”
she sits back and grins
I turn my head, give the signal, and stand
throw my napkin in her face
“Well, because your dead.”
I smile but she gives me a blank expression
Then, I step over the wine she spilled on the floor…
When she collapsed

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  • eminemgrl123 on Jul 20, 2009

    You need to watch your grammar and punctuation, because little things like apostrophes distract from the overall feel. Remember that everything- word placement, punctuation choice, capitalization, as well as the words themselves- either drives toward or takes away from what you’re trying to say. You do have vivid ideas, though, and I like that. With a little editing, I think this one would be a gem.

  • Amalia on Sep 1, 2009

    This chick cracks me up. It’s called artist license. You’re a fan of Eminem? You don’t exactly have the room to be so picky, love.

  • spiritwalker on Sep 3, 2009

    he he the power of words….

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