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Perfectly Acceptable

Saffy Stardust on Nov 27, 2008
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Someone made me upset.

what can i say
so perfectly acceptable
to make it all fit in this box

i think you would
dislike being placed
in my cube
my solution

for it tips your scale
not to your liking
you want action
not
solitude
in
this
box
of
mine

you make mistakes

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Comments (12)
  • Jasin on Nov 27, 2008

    great little poem, reminds me of being used.

  • Debra. on Nov 27, 2008

    What a nice little creative piece! Very well put!

  • Joie Schmidt on Nov 30, 2008

    Interesting – enjoyable work – beautiful!

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • Steve West on Dec 2, 2008

    Well put in a very little box.

  • Adam Henry Sears on Dec 15, 2008

    This is really good, Saffron, really well conceived. Thanks for sharing this.

  • Matt H on Dec 21, 2008

    Thanks for writing this! good imagery and abstractions!

    :) Matt

  • nutuba on Jan 7, 2009

    You captured it nicely!

  • lindalulu on Jan 13, 2009

    Very nicely written. I enjoyed it a lot.

  • Chambo on Jan 15, 2009

    Lovely piece you here Saffron. Cool to see another kiwi at Triond. Good luck.

  • Michael Eboh on Jan 20, 2009

    Very good. Thanks.

  • Reilley on Feb 24, 2009

    Very nice, I like the what you did with this.

  • Peter Cimino on Mar 2, 2009

    Cute little poem. Well done.

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