Lovely!

that is a poem of great truth very nice, if u would like check out my poems and leave a comment stating what u think thank u

Excellent wrtie.

A little bit subtle, a little more complex than first read detects. This is fun.

What an enlightening piece. Glad to have come across this site. Would appreciate feedback myself if you have a moment.

Is it fair to say this poem is revolting?
Sorry, I can’t resist a bad pun.
But I really like the poem — I agree, good poetry challenges people on some level, does not leave them how they started out, revolutionizes their thinking…
Well, you said it better!

great for my essay

i agree cameron

No NO no revolution

Dude, I do agree about poetry having the ability to challenge, to revolt against common thought but to repeat ad infinitum equals a less than thrilling poetic experience. Critique aside, I do believe you have something and maybe you just want to reach as many readers as possible through stipped down meaning depth and that\’s cool too but reflect on the gist of it and put more verbal color into it to really make it rock. Write on Bro!!

i agree with tim

Your writing is fantastic and so true every word!

I agree! Im new check out my stuff, I have hundreds of poems I write everyday but Im not sure if it is worth trying to get them published.

I like this one… its challenging.. great!

interesting

nice job amazing

though poetry is great action is greater!! if a revolutionary poem remains in books it won’t bring justice to the world.