Oldster—>There’s a bit of dynamic tension going on here :->but for an experiment, this lyrical poem was technically good and your word choices were appropriate in sound, sense, and feeling.

Elle says: Finely crafted – you have an ear for creating imagery when you write Oldster and in this piece..you have expressed very little and yet you have said so much i.e.this was filled with beauty and emotion my friend.

Well expressed like it.

Very moving poem. Great choice of words and rhythm x

Style is that of a craftsman. The yearning was carried throughout the piece with the wallop at the end so well detailed. It tugged at the heart too. TX

A moving poem oldster, and strangely quite close to home for me, so I suppose that’s why it seems to speak to me so well.

oh how touching a good write!

Perfect : ))
I love your poetry : ))

touched a nerve, a view into the pain of love

Top shelf work here wow realy good i’m gonna share this so true.

That was well done, and very emotional. Sorry I just getting around to reading your work. I’ve been a little self-absorbed. Thank you for sharing.

I’m sure there are many people who feel the same way about relationships. Nice poem, Oldster.

Great poem you old dog you. Reverse psychology gets the girl every time. You give yourself away in that last verse. Well done friend.

I really liked this, especially the twist in the tale. Good flow too.

Reminds me of this – If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it doesn’t, then it was never meant to be

you always make my heart hurt! why?

VERY NICE AND TOUCHING TOOO

very moving~i can feel the ache to keep her in your poem, beautiful

I had to read this again. Being a lady that has been pushed away at times, you really need to share your art and love of life with your fans more often!