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LilRoastBeef on Mar 28, 2010

A younger me.

You turned away as soon as I turned your way

was about to leave

but the hunt made me stay

The dress and the heels only made me believe

that it was going to be you

around my waist when we leave

tongue on my chest exploring away

I walk closer

imagination running away

already on the dance floor

we’re grinding to Trey

from the floor to my car

I can’t help but say

ankles to the sky

that by the end of the night

will nothing be the same

even with your face in the pillow

the neighbors will know my name

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LoveDoctor on Mar 29, 2010
Great imagery of an adventurous night. The fact that she turned away made you stay. Great imagery. “Imagination running away. From the dance floor to the car. Grinding to Trey, then to the car ( ankles to the sky) and her face in the pillow. Nice rhythm and flow. You allow the reader to grasp and visualize every detail of your younger days. Awesome poem. keep up the good work.
lillyrose on Mar 29, 2010
1st good to see you!:-)

2nd wow… such a great image laden poem, you got my attention from the off. Ankles in the sky! tantalising. Face in the pillow, Oh boy, you should see what was going through my head!
lillyrose on Mar 29, 2010
neighbours will know my name! classic x
XXElleXX on Mar 30, 2010
:clap: Hmm … hehehehe
Sashya on Mar 31, 2010
Great poem. Explores my imagination in a wild way!
LoveDoctor on Apr 10, 2010
I voted that I liked this one again:)
LilRoastBeef on Apr 10, 2010
thanks
CLUZ39 on Apr 23, 2010
Truly beautiful poem! sure explores imagination!…Fantastic read!

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