A true event from May 2008. As a novice kayaker I ventured into stormy waters off of Provincetown, MA on a cold blustery Sunday morning. The poem needs work, but I hope you enjoy it.

Menacing clouds gathered in the west,

Wind whipped waves flashed their white.

To kayak that day would require my best,

It was my third time ever, and oh what a sight.

The horizon obscured,  the sky was so dark,

When I set out to sea it was kayak and I.

Yet no fear, so on the journey I embarked,

In no time at all light flashed the black sky.

Soon the land was distant to me,

Surrounded by rough ocean, birds, and oh my.

 In the distant something glorious I did see,

Whales shot waterspouts far into the sky.

While the storm said retreat my mind said go on,

Go to the birds , for the sea they know so well.

Humpback whales in the misty morning dawn,

Watching them that day, I fell into a spell.

Toward the gulls I paddled, shore far behind,

They only would gather if bellies would fill.

My kayak would float even if I paid it no mind,

No matter what happened it would be a thrill.

I let my orange kayak, mere inches above sea,

Float freely then,  all so superb.

Spectacular visions  filled me,

With nature’s finest: undisturbed.

Black nose arose from sea to my right,

Brushing my transport with no ill intention.

Large eye surfaced and gave me no fright,

No need to paddle, no circumvention.

The Right whale arose, towering above,

Then bowed and nosedived straight down beside.

Instinct was to grab fin and sail like a dove,

Only under water, go with the tide.

Covered in barnacles, yet beauty intense,

Right whale submerged, leaving water so still.

My partner would ask: Did you lose all your sense?

But oh such a rush: a monumental thrill.

Now to find shore and safety once more,

Seas whipped waves in mountains so high.

Which direction to face, what was in store?

Lose focus now, and it would be goodbye.

Two dolphins came out and pointed the way,

They seemed to know and stayed with me a bit.

Beach appeared and my friends left to play,

I thanked my angles and then I did split!

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  • James DeVere on Apr 1, 2009

    Loved the intensity but the poem was all over the shop. Would love to see it after a few rewrites.

    Loved the passion, pal
    j

  • Christine Ramsay on Apr 1, 2009

    What a wonderful experience so beautifully put into words.

    Christine

  • Kate Smedley on Apr 1, 2009

    What an adventure, beautifully expressed.

  • Duff D Moss on Apr 1, 2009

    Wow – what an awesome experience that must of been – you’re very lucky!

  • CHAN LEE PENG on Apr 1, 2009

    This is a superb experience. Nice write up, thanks!

  • MrZebra84 on Apr 1, 2009

    Good job distilling the experience into a poem! I really liked it.

  • Paul Corvus on Apr 1, 2009

    I enjoyed it, Clay! You’re right, it does need some work, but what you have is a really good start. I personally feel that your rhyme scheme sacrifices your language and your own voice – I challenge you to re-write and shorten it with no fixed rhyme scheme.

    Also, even though they are eye catching, I’d lose all of the pictures except for the one of the whales. The pictures distract from the flow of the poem.

    But again, nice work! I absolutely love the line “Wind whipped waves flashed their white.”

    -Paul

  • nightcharmer on Apr 1, 2009

    What a cool adventure! Nicely depicted!

  • numismatic on Apr 1, 2009

    very nice photos, I like that picture of those homes near the ocean, good work.

  • rutherfranc on Apr 1, 2009

    I`m so jealous…

  • Ruby Hawk on Apr 1, 2009

    Exciting, You carried me right along with you. thanks for the ride.

  • Resounding Glass on Apr 2, 2009

    I really enjoyed how you took your adventure and turned it into a poem. It could use some work but I still liked it. You are very lucky to have had such an amazing experience.

    Thanks for sharing,

    -Resounding Glass

  • Dee Gold on Apr 2, 2009

    I enjoyed reading this.

  • Melody SJAL on Apr 2, 2009

    Very enjoyable and interesting, thanks.

  • Athlyn Green on Apr 3, 2009

    What wonderful pictures. This must have been quite an adventure!

  • Nathan G on Apr 4, 2009

    This is a very exciting piece capture the sense of adventure. You really drew me in as a reader. I’d love to see a dolphin or seal whilst surfing.

  • Jake O on Apr 7, 2009

    Beautiful pictures with this great poem. Whale watching is a lot of fun. This makes me miss the ocean…

  • C Jordan on Apr 17, 2009

    You captured the moment and the emotions perfectly.

  • swatilohani on Jun 5, 2009

    great

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