WOW… that’s pretty cool that she turned out to be a ghost roaming the shoreline for all that time. Awesome imagery too, man.
when can we see more?

Gee, she’s a ghost? I didn’t catch on till she saw herself. But this is really good. It kept me interested the whole way through. Thanks.

This is’t about a ghost is it? I think it’s about a woman who never actually lived her life and now that she’s looking back, she wished she had. Is that right? Great job by the way.

Hi ton, Brent, and integer, thanks for taking the time to read.
Yes, ton, you are right. It is about an aging woman who realized only when her life was coming to an end that she lost out on a lot all because she wanted to have fun all the time.

Thanks for reading my work everyone, if you leave your credentials I will get back to you.

Wonderful..very nice!

Hi Adam, that’s a stunning piece of work, beautifully written. Thanks for sharing. Kate

A beautiful creation.

Incredible – the feeling of essence sapping away just awesome . j

This is so sad..It’s a like a sad song you like to listen to but arises sadness within you.Excellent poem…you are really good at what you do.

hi… love this, awesome… your a good writer… thanks. Red

A beautiful and ethereal piece, so well written.

Christine

Great poem,Now I have to take a look at Jone’s poem, and compare. I like this Thanks Adam.

Now this is writing at it’s finest. And from a Canadian, eh? Yeah, I’ve always said that Canadians have more talent than Americans, …and I’m from America. Anyway, this is expert craftsmanship. I’ll be keeping my eye on you. Maybe you’ll be famous someday, and will send me a signed book? Thanks for sharing, and keep writing stuff like this.

Not familiar with DG Jones.

Well done, We can say we knew you when.

I loved the imagery and alliteration. You write beautifully.

as it was explained already, I don’t think I can comment on the subject matter.. but the feeling of joy transforming to regret was really there from start to end..

Each line is filled with such a unique description of a life merely wasted! Excellent talent!

Very beautiful, interesting formatting.

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.

beautiful, well done.

I agree with Morgana–this does remind me of a sad song.

Inna

Brilliant work! I love this!

A ghost! That was some special writing. Layed out (visually)beautifully too.

Hey Adam, thanks for this, this is really good free verse. Glad to meet someone else who knows the difference. Take care.

I commend you! This is an absolutely lovely piece. Your words are beautiful and thought provoking. You have done a wonderful job with this. I really love it. Jax

What an awesome piece. You have painted a picture with your words.

you have created vivid images with your brilliant words. Awesome!

I like this one

Creative

Adam, very nicely written. I appreciate the imagery and symbolism. It’s a shame when people look back with many regrets. The read had a nice tempo.I had to reread it a couple of times to grasp the interpretations. The descriptors were well chosen and fit naturally with the content of the poem. I enjoyed it. …looking forward to reading more of your work!

Wow, really lovely. Sad, but undeniably beautiful.

I love how you structured it as well.

Adam, that is a brilliantly written and fascinating piece of work! A very creative and lively piece with strong imagery!

very good, a powerful piece – particularly liked the “chase” sequence, the prose speeding up as the bear concluded the hunt.
It felt like there was a violent attack just seconds away.
thanks – revivor

This is an amazing write! I enjoyed the imagery and allegory you wove through this poem.

You are a master of your craft. I love the flow and the verses. Thank you for sharing this. I might imitate the style if you don’t mind

great poem

Oh! OH! This is so piercing and sorrowful. Yet it is a brilliant piece of writing studded with powerful imageries. Excellent job.
Monica.

That is a lovely piece.

Thank you,

Inna

You managed imagery and immediacy, and a life lesson as well. I can’t comment on whether it is better, as I never saw the original. But this is well done. You set and altered the tempo with words, format, and style, and kept it right through the end. I like the comparison of a young doe to a woman who never considered her life or path until too late. Beautiful and gripping work!

Nice poem.

Cool! I liked it. Nice.

Incredible work! I am happy to see that you took enough time to create something so wonderfully composed and something with meaning beyond the obvious surface content. Have a great day!

This is a lovely poem. Very well written, the format was spectacular, though hard to read at times. This isn’t the type of thing I usually enjoy reading, but this was great.