Seductress

clay hurtubise on Sep 24, 2009

Tags: Hope, lonely, seductress, suicide, temptation, tomorrow

The call of eternal light cast a heavy shadow over this earthly gloom.

Image via Wikipedia

She reaches me,

Touches me,

In places I shouldn’t say.

Caresses’ me,

Teases me,

In a hypnotic sort of way.

Promises me,

Me.

One she’d never betray.

She wants me,

She tells me,

It’s just my body that’ll decay.

I must kill me,

Defeat me,

If I want her to forever stay.

She leaves me,

But only for today.

Clay ramblings:

36
Liked it

Comments (33)

PR Mace on Sep 24, 2009
If that was rambling then I want to see your other work because it will be a masterpiece. Clay, they was deep and well written with a touch of the dark side.
jacksangel on Sep 24, 2009
very good!!
Brenda Nelson on Sep 24, 2009
I like poems that are fast and easy to read…yet tells the story of making choice in life/death…
Butterfly Musings on Sep 25, 2009
awesome I love the flow of freestyle poems, an excellent job!
Ramalingam on Sep 25, 2009
A timely warning about a seductress.Thanks for sharing
CHAN LEE PENG on Sep 25, 2009
Really a masterpiece my friend. Love your poems. Thanks, and I clicked you “liked it”.
Atanacio on Sep 25, 2009
is was very well written Kudos!
Jenny Heart on Sep 25, 2009
Well written! Great poem!
Christine Ramsay on Sep 25, 2009
I love your ramblings, Clay. Keep them coming.

Christine
deep blue on Sep 25, 2009
Must be a maneater or a succubus. Well crafted lines, nice work.
Darla Cooke on Sep 25, 2009
Great poem!
Melody SJAL on Sep 25, 2009
Awesome!
Sheila M on Sep 25, 2009
Very awesome rambling Clay
Tanya Wallace on Sep 25, 2009
Loved it clay!Read it 3 times! Good stuff!!!
Lostash on Sep 25, 2009
Really good piece, Clay.
lillyrose on Sep 26, 2009
great rhythm, very easy off the tongue! just how I like them x
C Jordan on Sep 26, 2009
Well composed Clay, but don’t go with her just yet. Prefer you composing rather than decomposing.
Christopher DeRoche on Sep 29, 2009
enticing- as it should be by the title with a large glimpse of the consequences of giving in. Seductress is dark and deep!
lillyrose on Oct 2, 2009
wow I really liked the pace of that! great poem.x
fragile18 on Oct 7, 2009
Awesome! Nice poem .
Etienne on Oct 13, 2009
Deep and emotional that reflects a real life experience. your words are alive and touch me in a way that I can almost physically feel them. This is what poetry is about. This is true art.
Teves on Oct 17, 2009
Nice written…
Vikram Chhabra on Oct 19, 2009
That was a masterpiece Clay. It left me feeling humbled and deeply touched by its sensitivity…
James DeVere on Oct 24, 2009
Nice work. Great seeing you in fine form ! j
workerbee on Nov 23, 2009
I know the call!
Bzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
Linda Lori on Dec 7, 2009
Nice work!
T.Rex McGoogle on Dec 12, 2009
Good poem. I like the hidden meanings. Took a lot of emotional effort.
V rank on Dec 24, 2009
Oh I love this and i love being seduced… hehehe… merry christmas!
diamondpoet on Jan 6, 2010
I enjoy you ramblings, and you wrote them well.
amilia snow on Jan 11, 2010
Nice one Clay!
Phill Senters on Jan 11, 2010
Great ramblings Clay. I enjoyed this, but I’m afraid I can’t publish my ramblings.
qasimdharamsy on Jan 13, 2010
Nice one…well done…
Peter Cimino on Feb 2, 2010
Well done…

Seductress

Hi there!

Find the Spot

Categories