Shall I?

lillyrose on Apr 9, 2010

Tags: cat, danger, game, life choices, mouse

Many things lay in our path, sometimes there is no time to ponder.

You alone cannot control my wild, fanciful desires

Nor would I expect you to try and dampen the feral

Beast that no longer lay’s dormant in your path

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But what are you to do?

***

I sense the panic under your skin, the whiff of fear

As your flight or fight instinctive muscles harden

The thick hair on your head seems to stiffen and rise

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Are you going to dare to challenge me?

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My green eyes flash their building excitement

As you seem to twitch and breathe heavier

Looking for a way out, a way of escape

***

Today little mouse I will let you go.

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Comments (42)

deep blue on Apr 9, 2010
I could have thought otherwise until I saw the mouse. An excellent write to brighten my day, Lisa. The burrow must be all too hot and crowded, lol.
ShadowPsychos on Apr 9, 2010
wicked
Christine Ramsay on Apr 9, 2010
Gosh! That was some build up. A great ending.

Christine
Temjen Imchen on Apr 9, 2010
Nicely put. It is the last sentence that says it all.
Shamyl on Apr 9, 2010
Awesome.
wonder on Apr 9, 2010
A suspenseful description, then a mouse! I’m an April fool.
Katien on Apr 9, 2010
Poor little mouse!
redmail99 on Apr 9, 2010
amazing
Guy Hogan on Apr 9, 2010
Very nice. It can be read straight or as a metaphor for sexual power.
cardy on Apr 9, 2010
Loved this you made me smile but poor little mouse!
Mr Ghaz on Apr 9, 2010
neat..loved it..cheers )
diamondpoet on Apr 9, 2010
I really enjoyed the piece and the pic was precious.
Geomorphosis on Apr 9, 2010
Lol…. Good one! I thought it was something else. Good craft my friend.
cathleengarvey on Apr 9, 2010
Beautiful, clever twist in the end!
STEVE666 on Apr 9, 2010
You big softy, Lisa. I’d have squished it.

Nice verses, BTW.
giftarist on Apr 9, 2010
That was clever.
Paul Roberts on Apr 9, 2010
Clever, awesome, colorful with delight. Enjoyed. Friend,fan, smile
jimbob1 on Apr 10, 2010
Miss L…Robbie Burns would be very proud of you (as I am)…I love his poetry, including “To a Mouse”…now you have matched his talents with a modern day version. And while I’m not a great fan of mice…this was very well written and of course is most deserving of another I Like It vote….
clickmarbin on Apr 10, 2010
nice post =)
Will Dee on Apr 10, 2010
I like the creative energy and structure of this work. Execellent piece.
Frances Lawrence on Apr 10, 2010
Very well written and I love the picture.
CRYSTAL EVANS on Apr 10, 2010
wow such an expressive language, love the imagery, definitely conjur pictures in my head.
Jimmy Shilaho on Apr 11, 2010
A good entry, I don’t know how I missed this for three whole days.
Atanacio on Apr 11, 2010
a very good creative piece Loved it
zoeyclark on Apr 11, 2010
Starts intense and the twist is so fun. Loved it:)
T. S. Lewis on Apr 11, 2010
Run mickey run. Clever write.
Melody SJAL on Apr 12, 2010
Well-done, nice photo too.
Hazel Crowther on Apr 12, 2010
Very nice cleverly done.
Starpisces on Apr 12, 2010
lovely and cute poem.. at first I thought you were scolding someone..haha
Authoress Terry E. Lyle on Apr 12, 2010
Awesome
seema1962 on Apr 13, 2010
GR8888888888888888 poem.
XXElleXX on Apr 14, 2010
The only good mouse is a dead one Lilyrose ~ very good my dear
LOVELYHONEY on Apr 14, 2010
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T. S. GARP on Apr 14, 2010
That was good! Very clever, liked it!
oldster on Apr 15, 2010
Cute little poem Lilly.
Cute little critters. Unless they’re nesting in your drawers, just let them live out their short frenetic lives.
Tulan on Apr 18, 2010
ahhh, lucky little mouse.
gaby7 on Apr 25, 2010
Very nice piece!
yes me on May 2, 2010
Really liked that one Lilly made me think of a burns poem for a moment…. poor wee timid cowering beastie
heart pounding in yer breastie. cheers
Leonardo da Vinci E. on May 4, 2010
And so it goes when it is the timid against the bold.
rizzei on May 10, 2010
the twist was really unexpected,, nice
TwiKnight on May 11, 2010
Ah, mousey, how I would love to set my paws on you once more… I’m not a cat person, though. Anyway, good job here!
Jerry Bradford aka Jerry Atrixx on Jun 11, 2010
Well done. Great cohesive expression and use of double entendre.

~jerry

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