Shattered Shards

Casey Kelley on Nov 3, 2009

A sad revelation.

Fowl and public ridicule,

has led me to exile,

Developing deep inside,

Hatred that’s so vile.

My lonely escapades,

have led me to a drought,

I wander aimlessly,

A heart filled with doubt,

I stumble upon a pond,

Where I stop to quench,

In this pool my flaws reflect,

and reveal an evil wench.

My blood it boils and with a swipe,

I make an awful splash,

Through the ripples I realize,

It’s at myself I lash.

While gazing in the broken mirror,

I have come to see,

That shattered shards still reveal,

My enemy is me.

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Comments (14)

Paul Roberts on Nov 3, 2009
Dark and broody but oh so true. well done here. I am enjoying the journey. Friend, fan, smile
Peter Cimino on Nov 3, 2009
Wow..very dark, but powerful. It gave me chills. Well done
petercurtis97 on Nov 3, 2009
It was so good with a shade of darkness
Morgana on Nov 3, 2009
Sometimes I feel that I’m the enemy to myself too..
I like the language you used I’m glad to see writing and to see you around these parts I’ve missed you.
STEVE666 on Nov 4, 2009
Wow! Self-deprecation and raw honesty. A brilliant write.
Will Gray on Nov 4, 2009
Wow! So very powerful!
Katie Marie on Nov 5, 2009
Great write for the challenge. Very self-reflective piece.
cafftee on Nov 9, 2009
Oh, liked that very much.
Duff D Moss on Nov 9, 2009
…and it’s the one enemy you can’t escape from. Great stuff. Thanks for playing dude.
cassandra antares on Nov 9, 2009
awesome, I love it,
raptor22 on Nov 9, 2009
Good one.
maranatha on Nov 10, 2009
Yes, my enemy is me. I like the imagery you use with the ripples from a splash.
Rod Ferrandino on Nov 12, 2009
Have read some of your recent stuff, and it’s good, even better than where you left off in June.
Darla Smith on Nov 13, 2009
Excellent poem for the challenge!

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