Oh WOW!!! : ) This is truely a work of art : )

Great poem.

Well done oldster.

Your picture with words is everything rolled into one poem and so well done.TX

Since death is unavoidable and unimagineable for most, you have written a poem that transcends all that. If this was your first attempt at poetry, it was a confident one Oldster..and you executed it very well. I also like that there was a little light shining through..providing a contrast to the doom and gloom associated with death and dying. As I was reading this..something I read somewhere popped into my head..It is not upon life that our ultimate individuality centers, but upon death.

Oh dear..first time for me..probably won’t be the last time I misinterpret the subject/theme/meaning/significance of a poem..but then you do have one of the sharpest intellects at Triond Oldster. This is the first time you’ve tried your hand at poetry ay. Very witty..due care was taken to represent the images accurately..and you expressed to me your experience/feelings on this piece..don’t want to give anything away. I do however think Oldster..that the shape/form of your poem did not convey (to me) what you were trying to express. I also agree with what Fegger said in the forum. Nevertheless, this was a mammoth first attempt at poetry..nice one oldster.

That was deep. Great stuff!

okie dokie.. people should remember that when you are eating meat, you are eating something that wanted to live just as much as you or I.. or maybe even more than some of the EMO kids…
eat less meat, I wouldnt say give it up all together,but eat less, and remember you are eating somebodies baby.
I keep pet sheep. They really are sweet when they play.

Great post!

Really enjoyed this. Celebrating life, death and whatever comes after. I’m not a believer, but I do believe we progress to some other form. I also like this for its clever rhyme. I’m a rhymer too. Good, meaningful poetry. Thanks.

Buzz

Interesting, I liked your poem.

ooh, great poem and one that Rhymes too! Don’t know about you but I just don’t get poems that don’t rhyme. Your’s however read really well to me.

Keep this up!

oldster, this literally struck me dumb and awed…

Geeze – makes me want to be a vegetarian. A very clever piece.

It may just be one perspective, but it is one that many should contemplate. Great writing!

Great poem.

I really enjoyed this read, Oldster. A truly great poem. Well done!

Great job again oldster.

This is a great poem but I would never give up meat. Too tasty. MMMMMM

never keep sheep as pets or you will not ever want to eat them.
I have had some sleepless nights bottle feeding orphaned ones and you do get attached.

A very well written and thought provoking poem!! Thanks for sharing

Perspectives change with the rhythm of the work; well done.

very good oldster. A very nice way to put it.

You are a great poet, one of the best I have read yet. But this gave me a few chills. I know that death is inevitable.

Lovely poem, makes me want to be a kid again.

I know what this is about;) – interesting theme Oldster:)

I know what this is about;) – interesting ‘puzzle’ Oldster:)

you do indeed have a poet heart, you write it well.

This is the first time i’ve saw this and still don’t know how it got by me. This was a very touching and powerful poem my friend. I didn’t realize the full extent of your wide array of talent until i read this piece. This was beautiful, and very well written. Well done ole friend.

Bloody incredible mate! deep thinking here.