A nice piece of work

If it were really ten pgs i would have read it all..but im kind of relieved it wasnt.

I thought for sure the snakes were going to be evil esp. when the tribe feared the rock of the snakes. I’m wondering if knowledge of good and evil could still be healed by taking all the evil concepts and knowledge of evil in existence, away from our children. then theyll know no wrong, but only preference and do what makes sense instead of whats “right.” if we knew no wrong perhaps there would be no enemy and so no fights.

i didnt like how the humans were arrogant. that was a sad fact in your story. i wish the snakes and humans were able to be friends and to pursue a good relationship with each other and their gods. But I guess Goodness THAT great would be hard to imagine?

You must know a lot about rocks to write that beginning.