A poem on society.

Within the mechanics of the social machine
The production line awaits with a conveyor belt of dreams
On it it you will find a wide array of people
Differences stand out and make us feel un equal

Within the data flow of the technical matrix
People push past hunting for their fake fix
Hiding behind a avatar created
Ignorant as if the mind is sedated

Within the undergrowth of the jungles concrete
You’re expected to stay sharp and up on your feet
If you ever lose balance, wobble, tumble and fall
The hounds will appear and come for it all

Within the belly of the abominable beast
Sucked of nutrience life begins to cease
Without us the beast could get none of its own
Left alone we could take our own throne

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  • Martin Kloess on Apr 13, 2011

    i like it

  • PaulB on Apr 14, 2011

    Thought provoking indeed.

  • Adam Henry Sears on Apr 14, 2011

    Ah the ills of modern society. You’re right we really should get back to the original meaning of social communion. The industrial revolution, while it has its ephemeral benefits, has made a mess of many things, including the family ties that once wove a community together.

    Anyway, the message is good and some of the rhymes are well-placed too. I just don’t like the lack of metrics in your free-form here. In my opinion it doesn’t roll off the tongue as nicely as it should. Thanks for sharing.

  • ibeme46 on Apr 15, 2011

    Thanks for your take Adam :)
    I should state I’m new to poetry but with time I’m sure I can improve. I’m glad you found some understanding in its meaning.

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