About a teenage suicide.

You heard the story all too much before
Boy cried wolf one too many times, but never followed through
So when he called to tell you his last goodbye,
You had every right to believe it was same story as has happened all those days past

He pleaded for you not to weep,
Just think of it as an eternal resting sleep
However you knew it was not the case,
And he would not be leaving this place

However the boy crying wolf, was crying out for real
The pain inside was just too much for him to feel
He had to go, had to find a way to make everything better
He was so ecstatic to say he found his cure

You said goodbye, see you soon
He went to say goodbye to the moon
Asking the heavens above to take care of his friends,
They were there for him till the very end

That night you went to sleep, like all the nights before,
But in a nightmare you awoke,
Scared and worried about your friend
What if this time its really not a joke?

Calming yourself down, telling yourself it would all be fine
You’d call him in the morning and have some breakfast at nine
So off to sleep you went again,
But worry continued to set in

Brightness shined through the window,
And you knew morning finally came
You picked up the phone and dialed his home
Waiting as it rang and rang

After ten minutes of waiting for him to pick up your call,
You went to find out what was happening once and for all
His family was gone, they left him all alone,
So you were worried, because of last nights tone

You opened the door and ran to his room,
Feared for his life, preparing for doom
You walked around and he was no where to be found
Walking down the hall, there he was on the ground

His face was pale,
He was cold and wet
The feeling you felt,
Is something you can’t forget

Heart pounding so loud you could feel it in your ears
There was no relief, there were only tears
He had no pulse, no life left in him
The blood was still pouring, seeping through his skin

The police finally came,
And investigated the scene
Officially another statistic
A suicide at sixteen

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Comments (14)
  • Leah Reyes on Feb 4, 2009

    This one gave me goose bumps…you nailed the emotions very wel.

  • papaleng on Feb 4, 2009

    power ful and emotional one. you conveyed your feelings so clearly.

  • nutuba on Feb 4, 2009

    You’ve captured the tragic horror so well here. It hurts. Great job!

  • C Jordan on Feb 4, 2009

    Quite moving

  • Majic on Feb 4, 2009

    Yup. It happens.

  • VisitingBird on Feb 4, 2009

    Keep writing, Poetry is a steep, slippery road. I like what I wrote when I was sixteen, what I write
    now is very different–better technically, but just different.

    On the subject, it is not unusual for people to talk about suicide often before they complete
    an attempt. Men are more likely to die, because they are more familiar with lethal means,
    or have gone to war and killed in the past. Women and girls are in the same amount of pain,
    and may wind up with brain damage from a failed attempt.

    STAY CLOSE TO YOUR FRIENDS. You and they will be safer. Maybe you can get together and
    talk once a week. Sure beats the streets and remedies for misery take time and attention.
    There really are no quick fixes.

  • Adam Henry Sears on Feb 4, 2009

    Hi, PE, how are you?
    Yeah, I’ve been there, tried that. Not a fun situation, not for anyone. But, time and patience and sticking it out will take care of that feeling. Just, think about what you want in life, not just about escaping it.
    This is a good free form has lots of emotional strength. Keep writing. Thanks for sharing.

  • Peter Cimino on Feb 4, 2009

    Geez…this one got to me! You painted one heck of sad story. Well done as always.

  • Will Gray on Feb 4, 2009

    Wow! It’s such a great write, yet so horrific and sadness fills my heart!

  • just me on Feb 4, 2009

    It takes a long time to get over something like that. Writing is a good way of letting out your feelings. My nephew did it at just fifteen, his parents found him. The worst thing in the world.
    No warning , nothing.
    Be well my friend, and stay in a good place.

  • S A JOHNSON on Feb 5, 2009

    wow this was incredibly deep and of course extremely well written.

  • Riley Themend on Feb 5, 2009

    This is an amazing poem. You are a really talented writer. Being on who has been put in similar situations with suicidal people, I can relate to this poem. Good Job

  • Christine Ramsay on Feb 9, 2009

    Oh wow! You’ve really got to me. What a sad story. It must be so hard to get through something like that. A really powerful write.

    Christine

  • macon on Mar 6, 2009

    this is so sad. well written though. it makes me feel so sorry..

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