Sunshine

Jane Jane on Sep 15, 2009

Tags: Hope, satisfaction, sun

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A poem I wrote during high school. Dated: August 4,2005.

Everytime I saw the sun shining

I know there’s a new beginning

Giving us a better day

A day with hope, with brighter way.

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Even though earth is full of destruction

It’s rays still give exultation

For it shines with perfection

You know you gain satisfaction.

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DulceCorazon on Sep 15, 2009
Like it, full of optimism.
giftarist on Sep 15, 2009
Nice piece!
chantell on Sep 15, 2009
Made me smile.Thanks
Hugo La Rosa on Sep 15, 2009
Short and beautiful. Keep up the good work, my friend. You’re a shining star!

Sincerely,

Hugo
wonder on Sep 15, 2009
Good.I could not write so well in high school.
cardy on Sep 15, 2009
Lovely work loved it!
KitKat93 on Sep 15, 2009
nice piece
Tanya Wallace on Sep 15, 2009
This was a lovely inspirational poem with a wonderful outlook on life! Greatl write!
Dena McCusker on Sep 15, 2009
great uplifting piece. thanks for sharing that jane
Jenny Heart on Sep 15, 2009
Uplifting and inspiring! Great writing!
mystery61 on Sep 15, 2009
Very nice, thanks for sharing it!
ashan1614 on Sep 15, 2009
Exactly! Each morning we awake to find that we have been given another day, it gives us renewed hope!
Rajesh Kumar Ram on Sep 15, 2009
good one!
fragile18 on Sep 15, 2009
very positive.
Will Gray on Sep 15, 2009
Short, but beautiful!
nadinesimone on Sep 15, 2009
Nice concept. The only problem being, you open with mixed tenses. You cloud the issue with past and present. For example it should read either: Everytime I SEE the sun shining I know etc. Or Everytime I saw the sun shining I KNEW etc.

A few tricks of the trade, and you will be well on your way to stardom.

Take care and keep on writing.
cutedrishti8 on Sep 15, 2009
Nice one to share..Great work
Mary Patricia Bird on Sep 15, 2009
Glad you dug that one up and shared it. It is very inspirational. Good job.
MySoldiersSweetheart on Sep 15, 2009
I like it, short, sweet n too the point.
T.Rex McGoogle on Sep 15, 2009
I love the positivism of this poem.
unown971 on Sep 15, 2009
Great poems!
Joie Schmidt on Sep 15, 2009
So lovely & light!

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.
chitragopi on Sep 15, 2009
Sunshine brings positive thoughts and fresh hopes. Great poem.
Shirley Shuler on Sep 15, 2009
Wonderful poem, it’s always good to see another day!
Eunice Tan on Sep 15, 2009
What a lovely piece
papaleng on Sep 16, 2009
lovely poem, and I’m surprised that you can write such emotional poem at an early age.
sammysam2k on Sep 16, 2009
sweetness! its really good! did you like get an A?
Sarah Sullins on Sep 16, 2009
Lovely poem.
Diziette on Sep 16, 2009
a lot of hope there
Heatherhills on Sep 16, 2009
A very nice poem….. keep up the good work…
DynamicLethargy on Sep 16, 2009
I like the optimism.
hfj on Sep 17, 2009
Nice poem with good flow.
jovelledeguzman on Sep 17, 2009
nice.. I like it.. very young…
Nisa West on Sep 17, 2009
Wonderful… I enjoyed reading this. It took me back in time…
Momof4 on Sep 17, 2009
Great poem, I liked it!
lillyrose on Sep 18, 2009
very sweet x
Living4Jesus on Sep 18, 2009
Nice poem!
Living4Jesus on Sep 18, 2009
Nice poem!
T.Rex McGoogle on Sep 19, 2009
Wonderful outlook. I suspect some of that sunshine comes from your heart.
rizzei on Sep 24, 2009
a great rhyme!! nice and simple:)
galindo on Sep 25, 2009
You are a deep thinker aren\’t you? so much like me.
Kimberly Wilson on Jan 2, 2010
Nice poem, but I’m more of a moon person!!
Netty net on Jan 16, 2011
I love the positive poem. Thank you for sharing.

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