Sunshine Haiku

Kate Smedley on Mar 21, 2009

Tags: Haiku, nature, Poetry, sky, summer, Sunshine

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Hopefully I’ve improved from the first attempt, again any constructive comments are most welcome.

Sublime summer sun

Banishing sombre skies to

Bring serenity

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Comments (38)

Christine Ramsay on Mar 21, 2009
Lovely work. It doesn’t need improving.

Christine
James DeVere on Mar 21, 2009
Just great . j
Debra. on Mar 21, 2009
Well done, Katey! I love the poem and the picture.
nutuba on Mar 21, 2009
This is a beautiful haiku! I wouldn’t touch it — seems perfect to me.
Darla Smith on Mar 21, 2009
Perfect haiku! I love the pic you used with it.
revivor on Mar 21, 2009
nice flow and alliterates too!!
Dee Gold on Mar 21, 2009
good job
PR Mace on Mar 21, 2009
Good job. Writing a haiku is hard. I have never written one so I researched it and wrote an article about haiku. It is still pending so be on the lookout for it in the next few days. I never knew it was such detailed work. It is a form of art.
Uma Shankari on Mar 21, 2009
Crisp. Good.
Michael Eboh on Mar 21, 2009
Well formed. Thanks.
Joe Dorish on Mar 21, 2009
I like it.
teddybear09 on Mar 21, 2009
Beautiful
rutherfranc on Mar 21, 2009
my problem is, I tend to overlook flaws and just concentrate on the beauty present so I`ll just say the truth.. this is beautiful..
F J McCarthy on Mar 21, 2009
Lovely haiku Kate,you are amazing at whatever you write.
Unofre Pili on Mar 21, 2009
That’s great.
jo oliver on Mar 21, 2009
wonderful poem, but again I do not know anything about Haiku form
amilia snow on Mar 21, 2009
i like the combination of the picture & ur haiku, lovely
Mr Ghaz on Mar 21, 2009
Excellent! simple but attractive. Nice pics too. I loved it! Thanx for sharing. Keep it up
poetic enigma on Mar 21, 2009
I have to agree here,
well done!
Monica Sappleton on Mar 21, 2009
I think you’ve got it. Keep it going.
Monica
Melody Arcamo Lagrimas on Mar 22, 2009
Wonderful piece…and the photo is simply awesome.
macon on Mar 22, 2009
awesome photo that’s perfect for the haiku!
CHAN LEE PENG on Mar 22, 2009
Haha…I love your haiku..
Ruby Hawk on Mar 22, 2009
You express the thought well.
CutestPrincess on Mar 22, 2009
loved it as always!
Adam Henry Sears on Mar 23, 2009
Hi, Kate, how are you?
This one is much better than your Seduction Haiku! You have everything necessary. Now all you have to do is master the image.
Aaron Paul Hicks on Mar 23, 2009
The word lovely sums this up nicely for me……great work as always
clay hurtubise on Mar 23, 2009
Great piece, love it!
Thanks,
Clay
Bullwinkle Muse on Mar 23, 2009
far more picturesque and melodic than my fumbling attempts at haiku. lovely indeed
Elizabeth Abbott on Mar 23, 2009
This also is moving. So very true. Like: “The Deep Truth”. E I like it!
vim3 on Mar 24, 2009
As a Haiku(and I am NO expert), this is better, but as far as emotions were concerned, I liked the last one more…which is more important? Well, I don’t know. I enjoyed both:)
julianhw on Mar 24, 2009
Perfect rhythm of Haiku and alliteration as well – plus expert imagery of course! Lovely
Tusaani on Mar 25, 2009
Great poem! Short and sweet, I liked it.
Tusaani on Mar 25, 2009
P.S. I’d click “I Like It” too if my browser would let me.
MrZebra84 on Mar 25, 2009
This one is awesome too, so many people on hear have written haikus… i may have to try one. this is one of the better ones i’ve seen though most definitely.
miraj on Mar 28, 2009
It is perfect in the truest meaning of the word,and sublime too.

my deepest respect and gratitude,Kate
LOVE IS ALL

Walk in beauty change the world.
Carolyn Ann Aish on Mar 30, 2009
I really liked your -first attempt- it was written like a pro. This one is great too.
StumbleUponWriter on Jun 26, 2009
Cool, I love this.. short and very sweet..

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