Things went wrong here with the work.On the look out for a team.Can’t do it alone.

I, my, mine-and the blatant me

My presence is but a speckle, in this awesome galaxy

Actions that I take pride in, has been said and done

Thus goes the saying-‘There is nothing new under the sun.’

Thinking individuals that we are

We have the right to criticize

We’re bestowed with the power of thought you see,

We have the power to analyze.

Let’s accept the corrections, with an open mind and heart

And keep the project ticking

Of which we are a part.

 

The rainbow hues are garish

The colors did not blend

Those little angels will redeem

With delight; in a mirthful team.

 

 

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  • John Watson on Nov 15, 2009

    Teamwork is a valuable skill you must master throughout life. Good poem! Deep in meaning as well.

  • Teves on Nov 15, 2009

    Nice piece…

  • abhishek40914 on Nov 15, 2009

    good one

  • Kip Spleen on Nov 15, 2009

    Very nice!

    Just so you know, if you were to keep the couplet on the end (the last two lines rhyming) and get rid of one line (or merge it into the ones before and after it) you would have a fourteen line sonnet complete with a couplet- an English sonnet.

    -Kris

  • drelayaraja on Nov 15, 2009

    Great article about team work. Well penned.

  • ken bultman on Nov 15, 2009

    Your poem seems to want to take you somewhere along with your team of angels…a team that has drifted from the softness of pastels to a more hard line style of art.. I find both to be worthy of the poet/artist.

  • svishnugopal on Nov 15, 2009

    lovely poem..i really relished it…

  • Priyanka Bhowmick on Nov 15, 2009

    dats a fine penned poem on teamwork… it’s a very good subject.. well done!!

  • Hansika on Nov 15, 2009

    great poem…thanks for the post…keep sharing

  • goindia on Nov 15, 2009

    United we stand and divided we fall. This is best understood by the word Team…

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  • Starpisces on Nov 15, 2009

    again, nice poem and also the art

  • Pinaki Ghosh on Nov 15, 2009

    Great!!!!!!!!!

  • cutedrishti8 on Nov 15, 2009

    Great piece of work……

  • chitragopi on Nov 15, 2009

    Colouful painting with a great poem!

  • Ruby Hawk on Nov 15, 2009

    good going,

  • Frances Lawrence on Nov 15, 2009

    A very nice piece of writing.

  • LOVELYHONEY on Nov 15, 2009

    too lovely

  • Eunice Tan on Nov 15, 2009

    Very true

  • CA Johnson on Nov 16, 2009

    This is a wonderful poem about teamwork, wonder. I also liked the picture.

  • thuanynguyen on Dec 28, 2009

    Great poem!

  • LOVELYHONEY on Jan 6, 2010

    again i read it it was interesting
    lh

  • Jane Jane on Jan 11, 2010

    well said and I love that picture.

  • SharifaMcFarlane on Feb 5, 2011

    Creative painting and poem.

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