nice work

Good stuff. You capture this fragile moment with a very delicate touch.

Nice short story.

A profound piece of work.

Nice poem. Thank you.

Inna

Poignant John. To exit… to survive.

Very nice!

You’re pathetic, Drew — what a life you must have, to be getting your kicks from insulting people on Triond. If you weren’t such a coward, I’d pity you.

Drew, that was unnecessary.
And wrong- this poem reminds me a little bit of Billy Collins- a brief thoughtful monologue about a seemingly ordinary event that is filled with meaning.
Also,the line breaks are not arbitrary, they create the conversational tone.
I like this.

Drew, anyone who’s too scared to post their own writing on Triond is not worthy of a response from me. I’m done with you. You can insult all you want, but you’re nothing but a troll who’s looking for kicks by posting negative comments. Go ahead, amuse yourself. You’re still a coward who hasn’t got the cojones to subject his or her own writing to the comments of others. Is that why your icon is a cat? Bye, bye, scaredy cat.

Hi John,

This is how poetry should be,simple and powerful.enjoyed it immensely.

my deepest respect and gratitude,John
LOVE IS ALL

Walk in beauty change the world.