Some things are just not meant to be.

A mermaid’s curse is to fall in love

not with a merman but one from land above

Obvious dangers and perils do abound

when that love is thrown and played around

So in accordance with the timeless fairy tales

here is a story of a maiden with fins and scales

Of whom with her feelings for a handsome pirate

Thus saw her beloved on the ocean’s climate

where two marauding ships firing at each other

Each cannonball trying to sink one another

with the battle, many a pirate died that day

Either from debris, swords or bullets astray

and so after the carnage and cannons fired

many a pirate and sailors’ life thus retired

but for this buccaneer so brave and  gallant

living for her is the fate he so warrants

He fought the waves and the icy water

until a little island to his care did cater

with a cave and fruit trees he made abode

sheltered from elements of hot and cold

but collapsing on the water before the beach

he was confused on how land he did reach

It was then that a melody hummed behind a rock

And with his alert senses he did make track

For a naked lady singing him a soothing tune

of how she pulled him ashore beneath the moon

Telling him now not to be surprised

Seeing him taken aback at what he realized

That from waist below a shimmering tail swished

But her face and the upper body was everyman’s wish

The beauty captivated him so but still wary

that this appearance, deception she may carry

But the physical loveliness and the gratitude

Forced him on his knees and vowed servitude

And then they felt a spark in this sandy land

That’s when they found each other’s hand

And then they found each other’s eyes

That’s when they shared each other’s sighs

And then lips mingled in a fiery blaze

That’s when  the island is wrapped in a mystic haze

Preventing a vision of what happened next

Except for the sounds of lovers having sex

And so they carried on for days to weeks

And the life of the city the buccaneer did seek

when a ship on the horizon one day did peek

and seem to come nearer and nearer really quick

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  • macon on Mar 23, 2009

    That was quite a story! Oh, it was so tragic.. I was hoping 4 a happy ending.. Pls do a part 2!

  • Yovita Siswati on Mar 23, 2009

    Interesting, how you re-told the fairytale your own style. The ending is quite shocking and tragic.

  • Bullwinkle Muse on Mar 23, 2009

    I couldn’t decide if this was more Gift of the Magi, or Romeo and Juliet. Quite the saga either way. And of course, the French term for The End is….wait for it…..fin.

  • papaleng on Mar 23, 2009

    a good tale but what a bizarre ending. Could you write a part 3 so that the mistakes taken by our lovers be corrected and a happy ending it will be?

  • Betty Carew on Mar 23, 2009

    Rutherfranc this is certainly a tale of woe. Great write

  • rockjuneDrock on Mar 23, 2009

    Very nice poem.. I enjoyed reading it!

  • kris miyasako on Mar 23, 2009

    Excellent write Rutherfranc. That’s all I can say for this wonderful piece.

  • Mr Ghaz on Mar 23, 2009

    Fantastic!That was great poem as usuall! I loved it! Thnx 4 sharing this cool stuff..

  • Annie Hintsala on Mar 23, 2009

    I love your take on an old theme. Well done narrative, and I like that the ending isn’t really happy…they seldom are.

  • Fegger on Mar 23, 2009

    Romeo & Juliet meet The Little Mermaid….this is really clever, Rut; and very well put together.

  • Dee Gold on Mar 23, 2009

    wonderful

  • Denise Kawaii on Mar 23, 2009

    This is a fantastic story! You have done well with this and pulled from something familiar to create something new. Great work!

  • murtazmd on Mar 23, 2009

    ending is shocking, nicely written..

  • miraj on Mar 23, 2009

    Finally,I was waiting for a new piece from you,and like always you didn\’t disappoint me,In fact I am spellbound how you maintained the rhyme throughout,These poems are the hardest to execute,it\’s like giving birth,You have to have the content to sustain the reader\’s attention throughout, given the length of the poem.You have excelled in that department,what a wonderful epic this is,the idea original and unique,giving the reader perfect entertainment.

    my deepest respect and gratitude,Ruth
    LOVE IS ALL

    Walk in beauty change the world

  • lindalulu on Mar 23, 2009

    Very nicely written with a tragic ending. Great write!

  • Kate Smedley on Mar 23, 2009

    What an ending! Beautifully and cleverly written.

  • Bo Russo on Mar 23, 2009

    Very cool but the ending was sad.I thought she wasn’t going to make it back without her fin.Striking similarities to the Montagues and Capulets(Romeo& Juliette)

  • Lady Sunshine on Mar 23, 2009

    If “The Little Mermaid” and “Romeo & Juliet” had a child together. Clever…

  • Likha on Mar 23, 2009

    Your poetic talent clearly shone in this one.

  • nutuba on Mar 23, 2009

    This is wonderfully done! I kept thinking Romeo and Juliet with flippers. I loved the descriptive passages. So nicely done.

  • clay hurtubise on Mar 23, 2009

    WOW! Great piece!
    Thanks,
    Clay

  • LOVELYHONEY on Mar 23, 2009

    EXCELLENT

    STUPENDOUS

    GLAMOUROUS

    HILLARIOUS

    SADNESS GLORIFIED
    MY SALUTE TO YOU IS MAGNIFIED************** ,
    BEYOND THE LENGTH ,U EXHIBIT, A TRUE TRIONDITE YOU ARE SO I MUST ADMIT.

    THANKS FOR THE EPIC AS SOME SAY,
    hope you get rewarded,
    for this one alone some day.
    LH

  • Morgana on Mar 23, 2009

    AWWW Lovely, so very romantic and so very sad that they can’t be together. Ruther, you must write a second part where they both have legs or they both have tails. Give me a happy ending, please. :)

  • denus on Mar 24, 2009

    amazing work.As always!

  • CutestPrincess on Mar 24, 2009

    hmmm… sounds like little mermaid and dyesebel… terrific poem! as macon said, pls do a part 2!

  • Unofre Pili on Mar 24, 2009

    My goodness! A very wonderful fairy tale told in poetry. You have the making of a Hans Christian Andersen kabayan. You’d better try a book anthologizing your works in order to give more justice to your talent.

  • Virginia on Mar 24, 2009

    This is a very beautiful poem. I love it. I got goosebumps while reading it. Reading your poem makes me think of my one true love and it describes, in a fairy-tale way, of long distant loves. Very creative and inspirational this piece is.

  • Kimberly Moore on Mar 24, 2009

    Beauty doesn’t cover this..I really don’t think there’s a word to even describe your gift! Congrads, on another success:)

  • ML Sheldon on Mar 24, 2009

    It’s rare that just a poem would capture my attention, but you have an amazing piece of work here. Very good writing, albeit very sad.

  • C. S. Robins on Mar 24, 2009

    It’s a poetic story! I can tell you put a lot of thought into this one for sure. You are very gifted. I especially like the darker ending.

  • Sakuragi on Mar 25, 2009

    Tragic but captivating =) very nice!

  • Majic on Mar 25, 2009

    So it started with Jack Sparrow meeting The Little Mermaid. Suddenly it was Romeo and Juliet…then a very funny ending!
    Nicely written!

  • DA Cournean on Mar 25, 2009

    Very very nice rutherfranc! thumbs up!

  • chris croke on Mar 25, 2009

    I really enjoyed that. You do have talent. Keep them coming.

  • kns1992 on Mar 25, 2009

    I really like this one. Great job

  • Debra. on Mar 25, 2009

    That is a very passionate, adventurist and yet sad tale you’ve spun there, Ruther. Great piece and well written!

  • Sandra A Flowers on Mar 25, 2009

    excellent, I applaud you on making a complete story rhyme, great job, self sacrifice is so much a part of true love , regardless of the tale, or tail,, great job..

  • Alicia Wind on Mar 26, 2009

    Oh..u just reminded me of the Disney story “Ariel” …but why the heck he became a male mermaid? ….some love story don’t have a happy ending…

    anyways , nice portray of words…

  • Doug Rasmussen on Mar 26, 2009

    I was enthralled by this story! I always know I’m in for a ride when I’m about to read your submisions.
    Peace!

  • teddybear09 on Mar 27, 2009

    Very beutiful.

  • seashell66 on Mar 28, 2009

    A compelling tale…I love the simplicity and depth of it.

  • Ruby Hawk on Mar 28, 2009

    What an exciting twist. You really put some fleash ad bones into it.

  • Luffy12 on Mar 28, 2009

    Great job

  • spiritwalker on Mar 31, 2009

    how horrifying!! that is just so unfair. this reminded me of a cross between romeo and juliet and the little mermaid. Good job rut!

  • Tusaani on Apr 13, 2009

    I loved this story. Great poem.

  • Joni Keith on Apr 18, 2009

    Ahhh, the sacrifices one will make for true love. Beautifully written.

  • Deep Blue on Jun 8, 2009

    I wonder how many days this lines was put together. An epic story of magnanimous charm molded to perfection. I really felt I’m holding my breath reaching out to the sea floor (and it was way too deep).You really are quite soberly minded my friend. Keep up the good work. Godbless.

    Will

  • eddiego65 on Mar 2, 2010

    Great story!

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