This poem has several problems that need to be clarify; one of them being; the light by night and by day gone. What kind of light do you have in mind here? Not of course natural light. The night is dark and the day is clear, not the other way around.

Go through the poem with care and try to see those odd moments in it. you can make this a good poem.

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I’ve said the correct thing I’m supposed to. I think you’ve read it wrong. ANyways thanks for reading

Loulabert, i’ve looked at your poems, they’re beautiful and fun to read

Really great!

You have to read it twice to see the light.

I think there is more darkness in the human heart than there is in the night.

True and thought provoking. Like it!

Very true guy, there is more evil in a human heart than in the world. I’ll make sure I write a poem about the beauty of darrkness. Thanks Mrs. Guest for commenting, and nice comment from you agriculi!

Nice one to be shared…Nice selection…

very interesting read. good work

Thanks cutedrishti and dmccusker 11 for commenting on my poem. Thanks it really helps me.

A thoughtful poem. May we all stay in light.

Yes chitragopi, we all should follow the path of good.

thought provoking! Nice one Buma

Thanks giftarist for your comment!

Well done, though to me I think the dark is warm and comforting. I love to sit in my swing on the dark porch at night and feel alone and secure, or go out and look up at all the moon and stars. As I said, dark is a lovely word to me.

Yes Ruby dark is a very warm entity to me as well, but in this poem I am writing about the dark and evil side of the dark.

I really liekd the way ti was written. Spooked me out for sure, like any dark poem should.

Way to go!

Thanks for sharing Buma.

oops, just realised how bad my spelling was in the above post. I was a in rush.. =/ sorry for that.

Max

It’s okay max, as long as you comment on my work I’m happy enough!

I like how you stay in the light. I picture Jesus Christ as the light.

It’s a good piece.

Thank you sourav and netty net for your comments!

needs some more improvement on the use of words but the thought is truly wonderful. . . you got the talent…, just develop it

Well expressed.