In the tradition of Henry Wadsworth Longfellow’s The Song of Hiawatha – each line is composed of eight syllables.

Through sleepy eyes the girl peered hard

Into the dark expanse ‘round her.

Green fields now in eerie shadows;

Creatures of the night awakened;

And cooler winds started howling

To welcome the shroud of darkness.

“It won’t be long now,” the girl thought,

“Just a few steps and I’ll be there.”

With renewed vigor she went on

Trudging the darkened trodden path-

Each step higher than the previous;

And darkness grew deeper…deeper…

 

Yet nothing could bend her resolve

To reach the world of dreams above.

“Up to the sky I’ll go,” she said,

“Where the stars lie in wait for me,

And the moon dances in their midst.”

One step at a time, she clambered

Slowly, but steadily she scaled

The mountain in her fervent dreams.

Soon with triumph the girl set foot

On the mountaintop she dreamed about

Just as the moon was emerging

To reveal her silver beauty.

 

With a deep breath of sheer triumph,

She looked down to where she started;

Now flooded with radiant moonlight

And looked so very far away.

“I knew I could make it,” she yelled.

“I dreamed…I believed…I prevailed…

“I took up the challenge and won.”

Joyfully she sang while dancing

Under the vast blanket of stars;

Stretching her arms toward the sky, 

Embracing the moment’s magic,

And delighting in her victory.

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  • SharifaMcFarlane on Feb 9, 2010

    Very encouraging and I like the imagery.

  • nobert soloria bermosa on Feb 9, 2010

    brilliant…

  • Lady Sunshine on Feb 9, 2010

    How very nice. It’s all about the journey.

  • deep blue on Feb 9, 2010

    That was truly insighful and inspiring kabayan. Well done.

  • seema1962 on Feb 9, 2010

    nice piece

  • Darla Cooke on Feb 9, 2010

    Great poem!

  • Debra. on Feb 9, 2010

    A truly lovely write, Mel!! Your work is always top-notch!

  • Guy Hogan on Feb 9, 2010

    I find great inspiration in this. The journey has been long but I have not lost sight of the goal. Thank you.

  • kate smedley on Feb 9, 2010

    That is beautiful and very cleverly done, lovely use of language with an ethereal quality to it.

  • PR Mace on Feb 9, 2010

    Quite an inspiration, my goal too seem a long way away but I will continue to try.

  • Inna Tysoe on Feb 9, 2010

    Well done.

    Inna

  • Eunice Tan on Feb 10, 2010

    Nicely said.

  • Joie Schmidt on Feb 10, 2010

    Very nice work*

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • maranatha on Feb 10, 2010

    Your imagery is well done – what a portrait this paints!

  • papaleng on Feb 10, 2010

    Excellent post with vivid imagery!

  • CA Johnson on Feb 10, 2010

    This is very good and inspirational.

  • CutestPrincess on Feb 11, 2010

    very inspiring piece… keep up the good work!

  • giftarist on Feb 11, 2010

    Great one!

  • Judy Sheldon on Feb 14, 2010

    So picturesque. I see her dancing and celebrating her triumph among the stars and moon.

  • swatilohani on Feb 20, 2010

    pisceans are biggest dreamers

  • Fe SJ. Miguel on Feb 22, 2010

    Well done yes! And it reminded me of the poem I which I did on crosstitch and which i gave to your Mom as a gift of love! Keep on writing my dear, dear niece!

  • Lisa Clayton Williams on Feb 22, 2010

    Love this!! Wonderful!

  • Lisa Clayton Williams on Feb 22, 2010

    Love this! Wonderful and inspiring!

  • ken bultman on Mar 9, 2010

    A challenge successfully completed by both the poet and her subject.

  • fragile18 on Mar 11, 2010

    love it!

  • rizzei on Mar 27, 2010

    nice one..great job :)

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