Six novices dressed in black and white…

In the smoky incense, wafting, choking, lingering above our heads,
Praying we kneeled, to Mother Mary for those long dead.
Six novices dressed in black and white,
Holding beads in fingers tight.
We prayed and rose, kneeled and crossed in turn
Dipping hands in holy water for those that burn.
We ate together every night,
Holding hands in fingers tight.
At vespers in our rooms we shared,
Our souls weren’t all we bared.
We rose for mass, confession and sacraments all,
Till the first white clad novice ran to fall,
She leapt away calling in fright,
Holding the wall in fingers tight.
Five novices rose for prayers, chores and tight lipped looks,
Hiding smiles, worries, laughter and all behind our books.
No words passed our lips in Mother’s sight,
Whispered secrets in the night,
Then one morning there was a room left empty,
Two had fled and now there were only three.
As the day came nearer, the Bishop clearer,
All the innocence and freedom all seemed dearer.
So together we took flight,
Holding hands in fingers tight,
And I and Sister Bridgett with her soft hands,
Together ran away to distant lands.

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  • Delia Morrison on Feb 22, 2009

    So together we took flight,
    Holding hands in fingers tight,
    And I and Sister Bridgett with her soft hands,
    Together ran away to distant lands.

    i love that.

    i also love the rhymes in this… they fit so well.

    nice write. :]

  • Doug Rasmussen on Feb 22, 2009

    Ah lovely. It’s not everyday someone writes on their positive experiences with the sisters. This reminded me of an old Irish nun I had in Catechism. I’m sorry I don’t remember her name but she always made me feel calm and centered… as this new one of yours did.
    Thnx!
    -Doog.

  • Christine Ramsay on Feb 22, 2009

    A very interesting piece. It took me back to my school days in the Notre Dame convent.

    Christine

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Feb 22, 2009

    “All the innocence and freedom all seemed dearer.”

    My favorite line from this. Lots of hidden corners in this one.

  • hfj on Feb 22, 2009

    Very nice poem with good flow. Got lost in a Catholic church when i was a boy one time. The place was huge. Well done.

  • Emma C S on Feb 22, 2009

    Beautiful piece. I’ve always liked Catholic imagery

  • DAVID CARTIER on Feb 22, 2009

    NICE PIECE IM NOT CATHOLIS YET I COULD ENJOY THIS IT REMINDS ME OF WHEN I WAS YOUNGER AND MY BEST FRIENDS SISTER JOINED THE CONVENT AND THE STORIES SHE WOULD TLL US

  • rutherfranc on Feb 22, 2009

    I`m afraid I read too deeply in this one.. but the last four lines seems to be telling of a escape not just from the convent but from traditional relationship of man and woman as well..

  • Joni Keith on Feb 22, 2009

    I’m not Catholic so some of the message may be lost to me, but the imagery is beautiful. It conjures up the bond of sisterhood

    “So together we took flight,
    Holding hands in fingers tight,
    And I and Sister Bridgett with her soft hands,
    Together ran away to distant lands.”

    Made me think of my dear sister and how much I miss her. I’ll always remember how her hand felt so delicate and frail in my own small hand.

  • Liane Schmidt on Feb 22, 2009

    This is so beautiful – - it has such a lovely spiritual beauty.

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • Lauren Axelrod on Feb 22, 2009

    This reminds me of the Magdellan sisters. I like it

  • Sarah Elizabeth Hume on Feb 22, 2009

    lovely and spiritual,

  • Serenity Jones on Feb 22, 2009

    Nice piece.

  • Tabitha Hergest on Feb 22, 2009

    Lovely piece.

    I believe it may have decidedly un-Catholic overtones, too…

  • ladywiltse on Feb 23, 2009

    I liked this poem. light and fun.

  • denus on Feb 23, 2009

    very nice poem

  • nutuba on Feb 24, 2009

    Moving and thought provoking. As I read this, I leaned one way and then the other (the comments above reflect each direction). This is very effectively done. Great job!

  • Morgana on Feb 24, 2009

    Beautiful story, beautiful poem.

  • Vikram Chhabra on Feb 24, 2009

    Very nice use of imagery. Great expression. Thanks for posting!!

  • Ben donovan on Feb 27, 2009

    Very enjoyable It’s been a while sence me and God sat for a good one on one maybe now is a good time thankyou.

  • Peter Cimino on Feb 28, 2009

    Well done. You wording really creates an image.

  • Athlyn Green on Mar 2, 2009

    I really like this piece. I attended a catholic school and was taught by nuns so much of what you wrote was familiar. I would like to use this at my poetry blog and would link back to your Triond page and profile.

  • Bullwinkle Muse on Mar 11, 2009

    “As the day came nearer, the Bishop clearer,
    All the innocence and freedom all seemed dearer.”

    Loved it from start to finish. You painted a canvas of memories for me from my Catholic school youth.

  • C. S. Robins on Mar 15, 2009

    Beautiful!

  • liavocado on Apr 26, 2009

    What pretty imagery, not to mention I found this poem fun in a subversive way. Very nice.

    What might be two typos:

    We ate together ever night,
    ever = every?

    No words passed our lips in Mothers sight
    Mothers = Mother’s?

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