A twisted love song, or an inverted ode to Leonard Cohen.

It was never my decision

Of what I was to do

Your were just a strange fascination

Like a spirit passing through

                    **

But we touched for a moment

I tasted the blood on your lips

The hunter had come a-hunting

Shooting strait from the hips

                    **

You were wild and free as the wind

With a look of innocence in your eyes

I was blinded by your beauty

Your very thin disguise

                      **

But you were the beast of the temple

You were the whore of Babylon

I let my heart rule my head it seems

As your perfume lingered on

                       **

And you left me only wounded

Not even—not even dead

I was starving in the famine

And you were my crust of bread

                      **

You were the flame in the fire

So why do I feel so cold ?

Why was I so led to believe

That all that glitters is gold ?

                      **

But it was never my decision

It was always out of my hands

But fate will cut you down to size

And lay to waste the best made plans

                      **

The signs were always there

How could I have been so blind

You were the banquet—my last supper

And on that feast I dined

                      **

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  • Darla Cooke on Sep 5, 2009

    Great poem! I like it a lot!

  • David Crerand on Sep 5, 2009

    well written, great rythym and pace.

  • Mr Ghaz on Sep 5, 2009

    That was lovely and well presented poem! LOVED it..nice words.

  • cutedrishti8 on Sep 5, 2009

    Nice one to share…Great work..

  • Sterling Christianson on Sep 5, 2009

    Finely crafted verse Steve. Every man’s fate, lol, in all seriousness this is great prose. At first it kind of reminded me of Todd Rundgren then it went into a Mick Jagger kind of theme. Really enjoy this material. Keep them coming. Thumbs up!

  • Jamie Myles on Sep 5, 2009

    WOW! excellent poem Steve. Your words paint a beautifully sad picture for the readers.

  • Debra. on Sep 5, 2009

    That was an awesome write! Very intense and well written piece!

  • Katie Marie on Sep 5, 2009

    Well written Steve. Enjoyed this.

  • emmahaynes on Sep 6, 2009

    Great poem Steve, I loved it! Thanks so much for the share =]

  • spiritandsoultemple on Sep 8, 2009

    Beautiful Steve- Thank you xx

  • lillyrose on Sep 8, 2009

    Mmm, left me quite chilled! for all the right reasons. Brilliant piece of work, glad I clicked on your pic now x

  • Kairos on Sep 14, 2009

    i felt something. you always have double meanings. you gave the reader really time to think.great

  • XXElleXX on Sep 16, 2009

    Oh wow..great use of metaphors for abstract concepts..this poem flowed beautifully Steve *S*

  • Kate Smedley on Sep 16, 2009

    Wonderful stuff Steve, I think this is my favourite of yours so far, your words are like lyrics. Excellent!

  • Lostash on Sep 22, 2009

    Excellent piece mate! Enjoyed it.

  • Ruby Hawk on Sep 28, 2009

    magnificient work.

  • Poetic Enigma on Oct 6, 2009

    I like this poem, very well penned my friend!
    Thank you for sharing (:

  • mdizar on Oct 11, 2009

    Another great one by you. You are excellent!

  • Themax on Nov 3, 2009

    amazing thought provoking poems!!!
    I liked it,Thanks :)

  • S A JOHNSON on Dec 3, 2009

    Such a well written piece. Loved it. ^_^

  • diamondpoet on Dec 9, 2009

    I enjoyed the piece and good flow.

  • diamondpoet on Dec 9, 2009

    I enjoyed the piece and it had a good flow.

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